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這是我在學校寫的作文↓ 我只拿到4分(滿分20)>///< 題目:An Embarrassing Day In my third year of junior high school,I uesd to ride the bicycle to go to school .One day, I late for my class of school.On the way that go to school,the bicycle chain falls off. So,when I arrive at the school, ceremony of... 顯示更多 這是我在學校寫的作文↓

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題目:An Embarrassing Day

In my third year of junior high school,I uesd to ride the bicycle to go to school .One day,
I late for my class of school.On the way that go to school,the bicycle chain falls off.

So,when I arrive at the school, ceremony of hoisting flag had already started.When I walk through
the rank, everyone gazed at me.I don't know why they look at me in that way.Until
I walk to my class, my best friend l-augh at me and tells me, my clasp did not button up,
clothes are not whole and hair is too disorderly.Be embarrassed at everyone's in front.What an embarrassing day it was! (結尾一定要用What an embarrassing day it was!)
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更新: 在請教一下,如何把英文作文寫的更流利通順.......至少不要只有4分ˊ^ˋ
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