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Willy Wonka had made more then 200 kinds of chocolates. All of the chocolates had sold in other areas to every corner getting the whole world. But, since 15 years, no one had saw any worker who passed in or went out this factory, and no one had saw Willy Wonka either. One day, there was a new said that Willy Wonka would open his factory and let five children that found the golden tickets in Wonka cholate to go into his factory. Charlie’s chance is not big, because he could only got a chocolate once a year on his birthday. The days went by, all parts of the world spread out of news that four children found the golden ticket, and Charlie's hope is more slim. But a magical thing happened later, Charlie found the money on the street of the snow. He took the money and bought the Wonka chocolate. When he opened the wrapping paper. he found the last golden ticket. Charlie could enter the factory to visit! The whole family decided to let the grandfather accompany Charlie to visit this rare risky tour. Five children are all accompanied by parents. Everybody began to visit under the leadership of Willy Wonka. They found the person that worked in the factory were the dwarves! Everybody took the magical lift to visit every department of the whole factory, but the children's avarice, spoilt, intolerant or opinionated character, came to light, that made them coulden’t finish whole tour. Finally only have Charlie left. Willie Wonka announced the final Grand Prix is the Key of this factory. He thinks he should look for an inheritor for oneself to take over his candy kingdom, and the person must get his trust. so he finds out that selects a special child in this method.

Is the story attracting you very much? I believe that you will love this movie like me. Thank you for listening, have a nice day!

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  • 高み
    Lv 5
    1 0 年前
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    請各位英文達人幫忙修稿~

    請各位英文達人幫忙修稿:

    Willy Wonka's factiry had come out with more than 200 kinds of chocolates. Despite all of them had got across the world even to the most remote corner on the planet, yet 15 years flew while no one had seen a staff step in or come out of this factory, let alone Willy Wonka himself. One day, a news came out that Willy Wonka would open his factory to public and five lucky children would get in by the golden tickets in Wonka cholate they have. Charlie stood a chance to go while he had a bar of chocolate on his birthday. As time went by, the whole world got to know the news that four children had the golden ticket. Then Charlie's hope seemed to get smashed. But a miracle happened on him in time. Charlie got the money on snow-clad street, through which he can afford to buy himself a bar of Wonka chocolate. When the wrap was ripped open, he had the last golden ticket. Charlie's got the permission to visit the factory. as a result, the entire family let him go with the grandfather. Five children were taken there each by parents. Everybody began with Willy Wonka's guide. They saw dwarves work there! Children were taken to each department of the whole factory through magical lift. However, many of them failed to complete their journeys because of the avarice, being-spoiled, intolerance or waywardness they have. Down to the end, only Charlie survived, willie Wonka announced the final Grand Prix Key to this factory. He pondered an heir to take over this candy realm, and the right person must be the one in whom he can put trust. Thus he seeked the chosen one through this device.

    Do you like my story ? I suppose that you'd love this movie as I did. Thanks for your listening, have a nice day!

  • 思誠
    Lv 5
    1 0 年前

    He said Willy Wonka had made more than 200 kinds of chocolate and sold to every house in every corner of the world. But, for 15 years, no one had seen any worker go in or come out of this factory, and no one had seen Willy Wonka either. One day, there was a news saying that Willy Wonka would open his factory and let in five children who found the five golden tickets hidden in Wonka chocolate bars. Charlie's chance was not big, because there were millions of Wonka chocolate bars out there and he could only get one once a year on his birthday. The days went by, and one by one four of the golden tickets were found in different parts of the world, and the news soon spread out. Charlie's hope died out, because in his birthday Wonka bar, there was just chocolate. But then a magical thing happened: Charlie found some money on the street covered by snow. He took the money and bought his second Wonka chocolate bar. When he opened the wrapping paper, he found the last golden ticket. Charlie could enter the factory to visit! The whole family decided to let the grandfather accompany Charlie to take on this risky yet exciting tour. On the opening day, the five lucky children, including Charlie, were all accompanied by their parents or grandparents. Soon their adventure began when the door opened and their tour guide, Willy Wonka himself, waiting. In the factory, they found the workers were all dwarves! And there was an elevator that could magically take them where they want to visit inside the factory. But not everyone had the chance to finish the tour. Those who were greedy, spoilt, intolerant or opinionated had to leave early. Finally, only Charlie left at the end of the tour. Willie Wonka then said the real purpose of the tour was to find a successor to take over his chocolate kingdom, and Charlie turned out to be the special child he could trust. The end.

    Are you interested in this movie? I believe you will love it like I do. Thank you for listening. Have a nice day!

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