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我的短文章,請幫我檢查文法與用字

有很多文法跟單字不確定怎麼用, 請指導我一下, 謝謝喔!!

It is my first weekend in Los Angeles. This week both excited and worried me. I feel excited because I met many nice friend, Mitchell, Dorrin, and Lynn. Mitchell is the eldest sister of them. She is always keeps an open mind, although she has a very poor sense of direction. She has many (不好的) qualities, such as lacking energy and careless, would result in many troubles.

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  • 鳥皮
    Lv 4
    1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    It is my first weekend in Los Angeles.

    --- OK (但建議後續文章內容統一過去或簡單式)

    This week both excited and worried me.

    I feel excited because I met many nice friend, Mitchell, Dorrin, and Lynn.

    -- friend --> friends (應為複數)

    Mitchell is the eldest sister of them.

    ---OK

    She is always keeps an open mind, although she has a very poor sense of direction.

    -- is --> X (同時有兩個動詞存在)

    She has many (不好的) qualities, such as lacking energy and careless, would result in many troubles.

    ---qualities --> personalities

    ---careless --> carelessness ( and 連接兩個名詞)

    --- would result in --> resulting in

  • 1 0 年前

    在首句,您提到weekend, 但下一句卻說 "this week",我猜您是想說"this week" 吧?

    During my first week in Los Angeles, there were ups and downs. ("worried" 是擔心,但看末段,您似乎是想表達對Mitchell 的少許不滿,所以我把"worried"改掉)

    I was excited as I met a couple nice friends: Mitchell, Dorrin, and Lynn.

    Mitchell is the eldest sister of them. She is open-minded with poor sense of direction. Her poor endurance and carelessness did bring us troubles.

    (在原句中您加上"although",似乎是想把open-minded 跟 poor sense of direction相比;若如此,建議您多說open-minded如何好,因為這兩者看上去沒有明顯的對比;所以我把although 刪去,改成比較中性的描述)

    參考資料: self
  • ?
    Lv 5
    1 0 年前

    It was my first weekend in Los Angeles. I had mixed feeling in this week. I felt excited because I met many nice friends including Mitchell, Dorrin, and Lynn. I also felt worry about Mitchell. Mitchell is the eldest sister among them. she is always open minded but she has poor sense of direction. However, she has some bad habbits, such as lacking energy and careless, which might get her into trouble.

  • 高み
    Lv 5
    1 0 年前

    I've got my first weekend in L.A. since I arrived. It's a period of checkered week. One thing that made me happy was them Mitchell Dorrin, and Lynn.Mitchell. Otherwise Mitchell, with poor bearings and the eldest among them I'm talking about, stays open no matter how circumstances would be. However, she's still got so many bad things on herself, such as carelessness, lethargy, of which I'm afraid that something bad would happen.

    2007-09-30 21:27:44 補充:

    What you put is quite Chinese. Try what I told you and get yourself accustomed to common dialogues between English speakers.

    2007-09-30 21:33:55 補充:

    Despite right grammar, it's not English and let them know what you're talking about. You know you can't make English just out of machine. You're talking with people not with robots.

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  • 1 0 年前

    It is my first weekend in Los Angeles. This week both excited and worried me. I feel excited because I met many nice〝 friends〞, Mitchell, 〝Darrin〞, and Lynn. Mitchell is the eldest sister of them. She is always keeps an open mind, although she has a very poor sense of direction. She has many (不好的) qualities, such as lacking energy and careless, would result in many troubles.

    Darrin→建議將o改成a

    下次你打文章時,

    可以打在word,

    讓word順便幫你檢查有哪裡需要修正的..

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