Lee 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

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Why I Major in English

I have been learning English for eight years.

People always say that English is very important to anyone in the world.

Actually, I didn’t think so when I was a junior high school student.

All I knew was that I need to do more tests to get the high grade so that I could enter the excellent senior high school.

Until the first time I went to the America, I realized that English is really important.

I came into contact with many foreigners there, they all spoke English even the French.

But my English was poor so we didn’t talk too much, just palyed games.

This experience taught me that this world is very huge, there are several countries and languages.

But English is international language, we can communicate with any foreigner in English.

If I know how to speak English then I can make more friends.

In the other hand, more and more companies need someone not only good at technology but also good at English.

If I am good at it,then the more jobs I can choose.

I wish one day I can speak English like a native speaker.

Therefore, I need thorough English education.

The best way to do in Taiwan is just major in English in the university.

It will teach you how to speak, write, read and listen.

So I chose to major in English.

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  • Yehoo
    Lv 6
    1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    按照您的句子順序, 我逐句看並寫出個人看法.

    I have been learning English for eight years.

    People always say that English is very important to anyone in the world.

    Actually, I didn’t think so when I was a junior high school student.

    (以上OK)

    All I knew was that I need to do more tests to get the high grade so that I could enter the excellent senior high school.

    修改為

    All I knew was that I needed to do many tests to get good grades so that I could enter an excellent senior high school.

    Until the first time I went to the America, I realized that English is really important.

    修改為

    I didn't realize that English was really important until I went to America for the first time.

    I came into contact with many foreigners there, they all spoke English even the French.

    修改為

    I came into contact with many foreigners there, who all spoke English and even French.

    But my English was poor so we didn’t talk too much, just palyed games.

    修改為

    My English was so poor that we didn't talk too much but just played games.

    This experience taught me that this world is very huge, there are several countries and languages.

    修改為

    This experience taught me that this world is very huge, and there are various countries and languages.

    (補充回答繼續)

    2007-10-07 03:00:51 補充:

    English is international language, we can communicate with any foreigner in English.

    修改為

    Since English is an international language, we can communicate with most foreigners in English.

    2007-10-07 03:03:03 補充:

    If I know how to speak English then I can make more friends.

    修改為

    If I knew how to speak English well, I could make more foreign friends.

    2007-10-07 03:04:31 補充:

    In the other hand, more and more companies need someone not only good at technology but also good at English.

    修改為

    On the other hand, more and more companies need employees good at not only technology but also English.

    2007-10-07 03:07:53 補充:

    If I am good at it,then the more jobs I can choose.

    修改為

    If I am good at English, I can have more job opportunities.

    I wish one day I can speak English like a native speaker.

    Therefore, I need thorough English education.

    (OK)

    2007-10-07 03:09:00 補充:

    The best way to do in Taiwan is just major in English in the university.

    修改為

    The best method to do in Taiwan is majoring in English in a university.

    It will teach you how to speak, write, read and listen.

    修改為

    In this way, I can learn how to speak, read and listen well.

    So I chose to major in English.

    (OK)

    2007-10-07 03:09:51 補充:

    如您對照看後有問題, 歡迎再提出

    參考資料: I myself, I myself, I myself, I myself
  • 1 0 年前

    在第11句的But my English was poor so we didn’t talk too much, just palyed games.palyed應該是played吧

    在第12句的This experience taught me that this world is very huge, there are several countries and languages.

    huge旁應該是用;而不是,

    在第14~15句的But English is international language, we can communicate with any foreigner in English. 其中的language旁的逗點也應該改成分號( ; )

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