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請英文高手幫我改演講稿

這是我自己寫的英文講稿...怕自己錯太多...演講的時候老師聽不懂...所以請英文高手幫我改一下...還有請問上台演講的時候

開頭要說些什麼話???

My First Pubic Speaking

My first experience of public speaking was at college. My English teacher gave everyone the homework in the classroom. I had to introduce my family for my college classmates by our travel picture in English. I have always been afraid of making a speech in public. I wrote all of my ideas on note book. Everyday, I practiced and practiced. Before, the day of my speech, I was so afraid to make a mistake. When the day of my speech came, I was ready, as I stand the podium, everyone looked at me, I was so nervous and began my speech, and the words flowed from my mouth. Sometime, my English teacher asked me some question. When speech was over, I felt so relax.

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  • 1 0 年前
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    My first experience of public speaking was at college.

    - OK

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    My English teacher gave everyone the homework in the classroom. I had to introduce my family for my college classmates by our travel picture in English.

    - My English teacher assigned everyone homework asking us to prepare for an English speech introducing our family with a picture taken while on vacation.

    >"gave" 是中文的講法,英文應該用"assign"

    >"by" our travel picture - 這裏看來像是說旅行的照片介紹..所以不應該用"by"

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    I have always been afraid of making a speech in public.

    - OK

    > 但不清楚您的意思是(1)說您一直以來都懼怕演講;還是(2)您那一次害怕演講。如果您的意思是一直以來(直至現在)仍害怕演講,那您這句是正確的。

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    I wrote all of my ideas on note book. Everyday, I practiced and practiced. Before, the day of my speech, I was so afraid to make a mistake.

    - Firstly I jotted down my ideas relating to my speech; I then organized them into a short passage. Before the speech, I practised it many times at home till no mistake is made; however, I was still nervous.

    > "Before"後面不用加逗號

    > 看上去您是想說您演說前的準備,但似乎欠缺連貫,所以稍作改動,若不喜歡,您的原文也可以的。

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    When the day of my speech came, I was ready, as I stand the podium, everyone looked at me, I was so nervous and began my speech, and the words flowed from my mouth.

    - On the day of my speech, I stood at the podium and got ready to deliver my speech. Once my speech started, words came out as smoothly as my rehearsal even I was so nervous due to audience's stares.

    > "I was ready"之後不應該用逗號,否則便成了run on 句子。

    > "as I stand the podium" - 首先時態應是過去式,所以應用stood;第二,stand __ the podium,欠了一個preposition;另外,"I was so nervous ..."之前也不應用逗號; 而"I was so nervous...." 和 "the words flowed..." 帶有"即使....但" 的意思,可以加"even"...

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    Sometime, my English teacher asked me some question.

    - Sometime during my speech, my English teacher asked me some questions related to the content.

    > 原文也OK :)

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    When speech was over, I felt so relax.

    - When it was over, I was so relieved.

    > 用"relief" 較適合

    參考資料: self
  • My first Public Speaking

    My first experience of public speaking was at college. My English teacher gave us a homework to introduce my family by our travel picture. I was afraid to speak in front of people, so I wrote down my ideas on the notebook and practiced so hard everyday.

    Before my speech, I was scared to make any mistakes. When I stood on the stage, everybody was looking at me. I was very nervous. My teacher asked me some questions during the speech. I felt so relax after the speech.

    我己稍做修改,希望你不介意,也希望對你有幫助!

    參考資料: 自己
  • 1 0 年前

    就簡單的自我介紹,不需太久

    那不然遇到機車的評審他會扣分

    對了,你的英文單字,用打的時候記得一個單字不能被分開。

    像這一段

    I had to introduce my family for my college classmates by our travel

    picture in English. 中的 picture 和 in 中間都不能被分開,會看起來不順眼。

    最後一段 speech 前面要加 the 那不然會念起來很奇怪

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