唯任 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

我寫的一篇英文文章 請各位幫我看看有沒有錯誤或需要修改的

Have you ever think about what you ususlly do in your free time? I did.

In my free time, I often do some excercise, like vollyball, basketball, swimming and body-building. I'll use my spare time to go to school's gym,in which there are lots of training machines which can help you work out your body.

When I am home, computer and TV are my best friends. I spend most of my time surfing the internet and watching TV at the same time.

Music and movie channels are my favorite choices because they have a

lot of top programs. I often log on MSN, which is a chatting tool well-known all over the world.

That's all about what I do in my free time, so what about yours?

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  • 1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    Have you ever thought about what you have usually been doing in your free time? Yes, i have.

    In my free time, i like to go for exercises for things like volleyball, basketball, swimming

    or body-building. For my body-building exercise, I would usually go to the gym in school, where lots of equipments are available, for me to achieve my full body work-out.

    On the other hand, I also like to spend some time at home. When i am at home, my computer and

    TV are my best friends. i spend most of my time at home surfing on the internet and watching TV.

    The internet somehow connects me with the world on my fingertips and for that reason i often log

    onto the MSN messenger and chat with people all over the world. As to my favorites on TV, they

    have got to be the Music hits and the Movie channels because there are just so many top

    programs accessible to my needs.

    That's all about what i do with my free time. What do you do with yours?

    2007-11-15 11:23:02 補充:

    1)Have you ever think about what you ususlly do in your free time?

    註:在此應該寫 thought,因為有個 have在前面. 此句解釋起來意思是,你有沒想過你有空時通常在做什麼, 我個人覺得,你有沒想過你有空時通常都做些什麼,意思會比較貼切一點///

    2)註:不應該用I did.因為前面問句是have you, 所以應該回答 i have.

    2007-11-15 11:26:47 補充:

    3)你談到你有空時會做些什麼,其中包括了戶外活動跟家中活動,所以你表達時若以比較客觀的 i like to... 來描述戶外活動的話,會比較好.

    In my free time, I often do some excercise, like vollyball, basketball, swimming and body-building.

    2007-11-15 11:27:01 補充:

    4)在你談到的戶外活動之中,你特別的強調你到去健身房的事,所以要有個連接語把前後事情連起來,讀者才不會跟不上你的速度...

    I'll use my spare time to go to school's gym,in which there are lots of training machines which can help you work out your body.

    2007-11-15 11:39:23 補充:

    5)現在突然跳到講家中活動了,有點跳的太快,所以要加個句子讓讀者知道你現在是把話題轉到家裡來了.

    6)家中活動包括兩件事,一個是上網,一個是看電視,要分別一一照順序的解釋會比較好

    2007-11-15 11:39:30 補充:

    7)講完你有空時做的所有事情了,所以要用with.因為如果還是用in my free time的話,那必須要再把文章拉長到描述完你有空時所有會做的事情,如果覺得已經不想再講下去的話,用with 來描釋就是以上講的那些而已,沒有其他的了的意思...

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  • 1 0 年前

    Have you ever thought about what you usually do in your free time? Generally, I do exercise if I am available, such as volleyball, basketball, swimming and body-building. At leisure time, I go to gym to work out my body at school, which has lots of training machines. (一個句子中不能夠有兩個關係子句,若非要有,其中一個要變成分詞構句,所以我改寫了你的句子,但意思不變。用現在式是因為你描述的事是事實,和時間沒有關係)

    When I am along at home, the computer and the TV are my best friends. I spend most of time surfing the internet and watching TV at the same time. The music and the movie channels are my favorite options because they have a lot of excellent programs. In addition, I often log on MSN, which is the most well-known chatting tool in the world. (同樣,陳述事實只要用現在式就好)

    That's all about what I do in my free time, so would you mind telling me about yours?

    參考資料: 自己
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  • 1 0 年前

    Have you ever thought about what you ususlly do in your free time? I did.

    In my free time, I often take some sports/exercise, like vollyball, basketball, swimming and body-building. I'll use my spare time to go to a school gym,in which (there) are lots of training machines which can help you strengthen/forge your body.

    When I am home, computer and TV are my best friends.In additon, I spend most of my time surfing the Net and watching TV at the same time.

    Music and movie channels are my favorite choices because they have a

    lot of top programs. I often log on MSN, which is a chatting tool well-known all over the world.

    That's all about what I (always) do/engage in my free time, so what about yours?

    2007-11-10 21:00:09 補充:

    1.現在完成式:Have+人+p.p.......

    2.do exercise 較不精準 應該用take sports/exercise

    3.work out 使筋疲力盡 用在這邊有點奇怪 應該用 strengthen/forge 增強我的身體

    4.surf the Net 是固定用法 不然就用on the internet或者是online

    參考資料: 平凡的高中生
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  • 1 0 年前

    我不敢保證我是對的...

    Have you ever think about what you ususlly do in your free time? I did.『應該I do. (我覺得因為你的問題是在簡單現在式)』

    In my free time, I often do some excercise, like vollyball, basketball, swimming and body-building. I 『sometimes』 use my spare time to go to school's gym,in『the gym』 there are lots of training machines 『that』 can help 『your body healthy.』

    When I 『stay at』 home, computer and TV are my best friends. I spend most of my time surfing the internet and watching TV .

    Music and movie channels are my favorite choices because they have a

    lot of top programs. I often log on MSN, which is a chatting tool well-known all over the world.

    That's all about what I do in my free time,『and』what about yours?

    參考資料: 自己
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