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請幫我修改英文演講稿

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拜託了!謝謝^^

My favorite artist is Jolin, who has recently released her new album named Agent J. I purchased this album in 711,and I with the friend went to SOGO to participate in her autograph session, although was very tired, but could saw Jolin and acquire signature CD was very happy.

My favorite song in the album is Agent J, because in the music video Jolin as the leather-clad Agent J and Performs the very difficult dance. It is impressiveness .The dance Jolin had to learn two new forms of dance in 10 days: aerial silk dancing and poledancing , almost paralyzing her right arm and causing her to faint in the process. It’s so amazing! Thus it can be seen, she is so earnest artiste, that is I so support her reason.

Jolin devoted her youth to studying the English language, self-studying English in her primary school years. She eventually majored in English Literature at Fu Jen Catholic University. Although makes a debut has many disturbances until now, but I think Jolin is a successful artiste now, and I wish her the best.

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不好意思~那711是7-11便利商店的意思喔

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  • 1 0 年前
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    幫您重寫如下, 請參考:

    Jolin is my favorite artist. Recently, her new album named Agent J

    has been released. I purchased this album on July 11 with friend

    when we participate her autograph session in SOGO.

    Although we were very tired, but it was so happy to see Jolin and

    acquire her signature CD.

    Agent J is my favorite song in the album because Jolin wears the

    leather-clad Agent J and Performs the very difficult dance in

    the music video . It is impressiveness .In this dance Jolin had to

    learn two new forms of dance in 10 days: aerial silk dancing and

    poledancing. These are almost paralyzing her right arm and causing

    her to faint in the process. It’s so amazing! Thus it can be seen,

    she is such a earnest artiste, that is the reason why I support her so much.

    Jolin devoted her youth days in studying English by self-directed mode.She start English learning from her primary school years.

    Eventually she majored in English Literature at Fu Jen Catholic University.

    Although this makes a great debt and has many disturbances until now,

    but I think Jolin is a successful artist currently.I wish she can do her the best.

  • 1 0 年前

    The artist of my good feeling issues her new record with Jolin recently and gets spy J named. Buy..friend..go..autograph..conference..participate..very..become tired..but..see..signature..obtain..very..happy.The song of my good feeling : with the very difficult thing that executes the dance done as spy J that leather that has it puts on by music in spying with Cacjou J for recording Jolin. This it is really wonderful, and two new forms of the dance are mastered without fail and is day of dance Jolin in ten: It is brought that the right arm she of dance, steel pipe of the ribbon of the silk in the air, and her who is almost paralyzed is dopy consideration in the process and knocks it down. It is very surprised. She is such a serious artist, and I support her cause for that. Jolin she is in years of the elementary school of her after English is studied at young person's time, and English has already been studied. Her final specialty has gone to the Catholic university in the literature of Britain. And, now since it thinks of Jolin, I pray to me for the her goodness however as one splendid artist as for the premiere showing of the trademark in there are a lot of obstructions that will arrive soon.

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