John Connor 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

幫忙檢查這篇英文作文??

Self-Introduction

My name is Wayne Wang.I am from Tainan. I have lived in Taipei ever since I became a senior high school student ten years ago.

I have a soft and sweet family and there are five peoples in my family.

My mother is a housewife who takes very good care of the family and my father is a government worker .My young brother and my young sister is a junior high school student.

I love my family and after school.I seldom party with my friends.I like to spend ever minutes I have with my family. Every weekend we go for a drive .Sometimes,we go to the movies or eat out.

Basically,I am a good student,but I am also a filial child.

希望大家能幫我檢查哪裡有錯誤,或語法不通的地方,謝謝

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  • 1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    (1)

    My name is Wayne Wang.I am from Tainan. I have lived in Taipei ever

    since I became a senior high school student ten years ago. (OK)

    (2)

    I have a soft and sweet family and there are five peoples in my family.

    (有問題)

    family用soft來修飾,怪怪的;people本來就是複數,不用加s;

    peoples是很多民族的意思。

    修改後:

    I have a sweet home and there are five people in my family.

    (3)

    My mother is a housewife who takes very good care of the family and

    my father is a government worker .My young brother and my young

    sister is a junior high school student. (有問題)

    修改後:

    My mother is a housewife, who takes good care of the family and my

    father is a government worker. My young brother and my young sister

    are junior high school students.

    (4)

    I love my family and after school.I seldom party with my friends.I like

    to spend ever minutes I have with my family. Every weekend we go

    for a drive .Sometimes,we go to the movies or eat out. (有問題)

    修改後:

    After school, I usually go home directly. I seldom go out with my friends.

    My family and I enjoy going for a drive on the weekend. Sometimes

    we go to the movies or eat out in a nice restaurant.

    (5)

    Basically,I am a good student,but I am also a filial child. (有問題)

    你的標題是自我介紹,可是竟然沒有說到你幾歲,目前的職業

    或生活,感覺很奇怪,如果你的標題是My family(我的家庭),

    算是寫的不錯。

    文章的內容一定要切合主題,你的基本文法算OK,只是有些

    單字的用法不夠嫻熟,請你繼續加油。

    希望有幫到你。

    參考資料: Myself
  • 1 0 年前

    "Both my young brother and my young sister are a junior high school student."

    Here "young" should be "younger".

  • 1 0 年前

    Self-Introduction

    My name is Wayne Wang.I am from Tainan. I have “been living” in Taipei (我把ever刪了,不需要) since I became a senior high school student ten years ago.

    I have a *gentle*(soft 不適合用在人) and sweet family and there are five people(不用s, people 已經是復數) in my family.

    My mother is a housewife who takes very good care of the family and my father is a government worker .My *younger* brother and my *younger* sister *are*(兩人) junior high school *students*(兩人所以復數).

    I love my family and after school. I *rarely*(rarely 是比較好的用法) party with my friends. I like to spend *every*(你忘記y了) minute(every 後面都是單數) I have with my family. Every weekend we go for a ride(ride比較順).Sometimes, we go to the movies or eat out.

    Basically,I am a good student,*and*(but是可是的意思,你不會說我是一個好學生,可是我也是一個孝順的孩子) I am also a filial child.

    2007-11-20 06:03:27 補充:

    我想把gentle改成warm

    抱歉我的疏忽

    2007-11-20 06:05:24 補充:

    第四段

    *I love my family.after school, *I *rarely*(rarely 是比較好的用法) party with my friends, *because* I like to spend *every*(你忘記y了) minute(every 後面都是單數) I have with my family. Every weekend we go for a ride(ride比較順).Sometimes, we go to the movies or eat out.

    抱歉有點亂

    參考資料: 留學至今的經驗, 我, 我
  • 1 0 年前

    My name is Wayne Wang, andI am from Tainan. I have lived in Taipei since I became a high school student ten years ago.

    I have a sweet family and there are five peoples in my family.

    這一句不可以用soft來形容家庭!soft是用來形容事物!

    My mother is a housewife who takes very good care of the family, and my father is a government worker.My young brother and my young sister are junior high school students.

    你再講你弟弟跟妹妹的同時!要用複數動詞!也就是are而不是is!student也要加s變成複數!因為你是再講2個人!而不是1個人!

    I love my family and after school.I seldom "have"(你少了動詞) party with my friends.I like to spend ever minutes I have with my family(這句很奇怪你是不是要說 I like to spend time with my family when I can.). Every weekend, we go for a drive .Sometimes,we go to the movies or eat out.

    2007-11-20 03:37:51 補充:

    I have a sweet family and there are five people in my family.

    這一句不可以用soft來形容家庭!soft是用來形容事物!People已經是複數了!所以不用加S~

    Basically,I am a good student and a filial child.

    參考資料: 自己, 自己
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  • Self-Introduction

    My name is Wayne Wang.I am from Tainan. I have been lived in Taipei ever since I became a senior high school student ten years ago.

    I have a warm and sweet family and there are five people in my family.

    My mother is a housewife who takes very good care of us and my father is a government worker . Both my young brother and my young sister are a junior high school student.

    I love my family very much .after school,I seldom party with my friends.I like to spend every minute I have with my family. Every weekend we go for a drive .Sometimes,we go to the movies or eat out.

    Basically,I am a good student,and also a filial child.

    簡單幫你改一下

    2007-11-21 12:51:58 補充:

    越晚答的越厲害 因為都參考先達人的回答

    參考資料: 007 Bond, James Bond
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