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英文 If I could fly

    If I could fly

  我們口頭報告要用的,幫我看看有什麼怪怪的好嗎?:)

  順便幫我看有沒有夠100字(懶 xD 遭毆)

  內容如下:

If I could fly, I could be in the sky, and fly up and down without airplane. Also, I would like to play hide-and-seek with birds, sleep on the soft clouds, and enjoy the fresh air.

If I could fly, I would like to find Heaven, and know what it looks like, is it beautiful, too. It would be a wonderful adventure.

If I could fly, I could go anywhere easily. The higher I could fly, the more far I could arrive. I would like to travel around the whole world, see the white snow in the top of mountain, the fish swimming in the calm lake, and then share the things with my family and friends.

If I could fly, my life would be pretty cool!

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更遠到底是farther還是further?

我查奇摩的字典都有呀- -

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    1 0 年前
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    If I could fly, I could be in the sky, and fly up and down without wings. I would like to play hide-and-seek with birds, sleep on the soft clouds, and enjoy the fresh air as well.

    应该用 wings 而不是airplane

    别放 also 在前面。

    If I could fly, I would like to find Heaven and get to know how it looks like. Whether it beautiful or not. It would be a wonderful and excited adventure.

    帮你改了一点点。

    在这里应该用"get to know how it looks like = 让我知道它是怎样的 "不可以用what.

    If I could fly, I could go to anywhere easily. The higher I could fly, the more far I could arrive. I would like to travel around the world, see the snow in the top of mountain, the fish swimming in the ocean, and then share the experience with my family and friends.

    world 就可以了不用 whole

    snow 就可以了不用 white

    感觉用海洋=ocean比较好

    things 换成 experience

    If I could fly, my life would be pretty cool!

    大致上都可以也很好。

    加油!!

    2007-11-22 09:47:51 補充:

    下面的大大翻到怪怪的。

    搭飛機也不会用, go up and down应该用 and flying here and there without the airplane.

    然后我在我的解释里,我用wings来代表是因为我觉得“我可以不用翅膀飞上飞下。”好像比较好。哈哈哈

    "far的比較級是farther"应该是"further"

    The higher I could fly, the (further) I could (go and see). 很不顺的语法。

    加油!!

    2007-11-22 22:51:59 補充:

    farther = far的比较级

    further = 更远的:在程度上更深的、时间上更往前的或空间上更远.

    恩~~

    给我我会用further。

    參考資料: 自己
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