寶拉 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

英文的開發信~請給點意見

Dear sir,

We take this honor to introduce ourselves as an electronics company. We accordingly make the following offer: IC, Memory, Chipset and various passive components...etc. We can provide all kinds of IC with best quality at the competitive prices.

We are desirous of expanding trade with you in the future. Please visit our website: http://www.xxx.com/ to understand more about our products.

If any of our products are interest to you, please feel free to contact us any time.

We are looking forward to hearing from you soon.

因為公司並沒有這方面的前輩....

所以PO上知識+....

希望英文好的幫我檢查一下...

也希望有經驗的人幫我看一下這樣寫O不OK哩~~

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第一句是We take this honor to introduce ourselves as an electronics company who is specialized in exporting electronic parts.

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  • PJ
    Lv 5
    1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    以下是我稍作修改的部份 麻煩你自己對照看(底線部分是我建議的修改 說明在下面)

    Dear sir,

    It's an honor for us to introduce ourselves as an electronics company specialized in exporting electronic parts. We accordingly make the following offer: IC, Memory, Chipset and various passive components...etc. We can provide all kinds of IC with best quality at the competitive prices.

    We'd like to expand trade with you some time soon. Please visit our website: http://www.xxx.com/ to get more informations about our products.

    If you are interested in any of our products, please feel free to contact us any time.

    We are looking forward to hearing from you soon.

    大致上沒問題 不過

    1連續兩句開頭都用We其實最好避免 且we take the honor的用法比較激進 改噓主詞會更口語

    2一般英文是沒有we are desirous的用法 所以我改成would like to, 後面 in the future語意似乎不夠強 建議改為上面的說法.

    3相關資訊不需要用understand 用get the informations即可

    4原句文法上有錯誤 如果是事物和interest 並用 那是interesting 有趣的 如果是有興趣如何如何 則反過來 是人對事物有興趣 這樣比較口語 變成one is interrsted in something.

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