請幫我訂正英文作文

請問有人可以幫我檢查下面的那篇作文哪裡需要訂正嗎? 或者是文法有錯誤的地方可以幫我修改嗎? 但是最少要有120個字 因為這篇作文星期五要交,所以請盡快,謝謝各位大大! John and Amy were walking down the street on their way home. Both of them took the ice cream which they had just bought from the 7-11. They walking along the street, chatting about their traveling plan. Suddenly ,they saw a... 顯示更多 請問有人可以幫我檢查下面的那篇作文哪裡需要訂正嗎?
或者是文法有錯誤的地方可以幫我修改嗎?
但是最少要有120個字
因為這篇作文星期五要交,所以請盡快,謝謝各位大大!

John and Amy were walking down the street on their way home.
Both of them took the ice cream which they had just bought from the 7-11.
They walking along the street, chatting about their traveling plan.
Suddenly ,they saw a huge shadow of a monster.
They were so scared that they cast away their ice cream.
As they prepared to ran away they heard a faint sound.
Therefore ,they decided to check out what the sound is.
When they to approach the sound ,they found nothing except a puppy.
The puppy went out and licked the ice cream.
John and Amy looked at each other and roar with laughter.
But the ice cream had threw away.
What a pity.
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