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這是一篇有關"我做喜愛的食物"英文文章

The Shrimp

When I was children, I’m fat boy. Because like eat more and more, but my favorite Is shrimp. In summer vacation, my family always took me to the beach .I will remember the taste of the Shrimp caught that day. That day the beach was quiet and still, so there were many crabs walking slowly on the whiter sand. We sat a few feet away from my fathers special traps. The traps were made of bamboo, and they looked like round cages, but one side had a small entrance for the shrimp to go in. We play beach volleyball and swim to go fishing. Tonight we had generous B.B.Q from dinner. We talk and eat for hours and enjoy our family. Everyone feels happy, relaxed and full.

finally we should be leave there. I hope coming again until the next summer vacation

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  • 1 0 年前
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    The Shrimp (My favorite food - Shrimps)

    I was a fat kid when I was little. Because I like to eat a lot, and my favorite (food) is shrimp. In summer vacations, my family always took me to the beach .I still remember the taste of the Shrimp caught on that day. On that day, the beach was quiet and still, so there were many crabs crawling slowly on the white sand. We sat a few feet away from my fathers special traps. The traps were made of bamboo, and they looked like round cages. However one side had a small entrance for the shrimps to go in. We played beach volleyball and swam to go fishing. Later in the evening, we all had a generous serve of B.B.Q for dinner. We talked and ate for hours and enjoyed the family time. Everyone felt happy, relaxed and fulfilled.

    As the time gradually went by, we thought we should be leaving there. I hope to come again next summer vacation.

    Choose a better title, like "my summer vacation" or "the beach" ("the shrimp" really has little relevance to your writing)

  • 1 0 年前

    The Shrimp

    When I was a child, I'm a round boy.

    Because I likes to eat more and more food,

    but my favorite food is shrimp.

    In summer vacation, my family always took me to the beach.

    I still remember the taste of the shrimp that we caught that day.

    On that day, the beach was quiet and stationery, so there are many crabs walking slowly on the whiter sand.

    We sat a few feet away from my father's special traps.

    The traps were made of bamboo by my fahter, and they looked like

    round cages, but one aside had a small entrance for shrimps to enter.

    We play volleyball on the beach ,go swimming and fishing.

    Tonight we had generous B.B.Q. for dinner.

    We talk and eat for hours and enjor our family time.

    Everyone feels happy, relaxed and full.

    Finally, it's time for us to leave there.

    I hope we can come here again until the next year's summer vacation.

    參考資料: myself
  • 路人
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    1 0 年前

    I’m fat boy. 改成 I was a fat boy.

    Because like eat 要有主詞

    more and more 改成 very much

    my favorite Is shrimp. 改成 I prefer to the shrimp.

    In summer vacation 改成 In the summer vacation.

    參考資料: 自己
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