水母漂 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

幫我檢查一下文法有沒有錯!!!

有錯誤可以幫我修改一下嗎?

Hello,everyone! This is my first time to report on the stage. So,I am very nervous now.

But I will try to let you know what I say. Return to the theme,because the winter vacation is coming soon,I prepare a piece of news about travel.

Several days ago,announced the news大安 river,because of the undermining, it forms a canyon. The news attracted a lot of people to visit. There is not a scenic resort. It don’t have any safety.To take pictures,some tourist is too close the steep. It is very dangerous.The beautiful scenery draw in large crowds to visit.Although there is a sign,which says”Danger-deep water!Don’t approach”,no one cares.The canyon is beautiful,but it is collaspe easily.If we are too close the steep,we may fall into the valley.

My question is”To take pictures,will you do these dangerous things?”

Thanks for listening.

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  • 1 0 年前
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    Hello everyone! This is my first time presenting onstage, so I am feeling very nervous now. But I will try my best to express myself. Now, back to the main topic! Since winter vacation is coming soon, I prepared a piece of news about travel.

    Several days ago, the news reported on Da An river, which is the site of a canyon due to landslides. The news attracted a lot of visitors. However, the canyon at Da An river is not made to be a scenic resort. That is, no safety precautions has been taken at the site. Also, some tourists has been going too close to the edge of the steep cliff in order to take pictures. Needless to say, it is very dangerous. The beautiful scenery draws in a large crowd to come visit. Even though there is a sign that says "Danger! Deep water. Don't Approach!", nobody seems to care. The canyon is beautiful, but it may collapse easily. If we are too close to the edge, we may fall into the valley.

    So my question is, "To take pictures, would you do such a dangeous thing?"

    What do you think?

    Thanks for listening.

    參考資料: Hope you don't mind, I took liberties to make it sound better.
  • 1 0 年前

    Hello,everyone! This is my first time to present in class by myself.

    So you can feel how nervous I'm at this moment.

    But I will try my best to let you know what I say.

    Let's start our talk, because the winter vacation is coming soon,

    I prepare a piece of news about traveling.

    Several days ago,the news about Da-an river was released,

    because of undermining, it forms a canyon there. The news attracted

    lots of curious tourists to visit. The place is not a scenic resort, so it

    doesn't have any safety instrument. Some tourists, in order to take

    pictures, are too close to the steep, it is very dangerous.

    The tourists were too amazed by the scene to notice the sign, which

    says”Dangerous,deep waters!Don’t approach". Although the canyon

    is beautiful, no safety instrument was prepared, if the weight over the

    canyon could bare, the canyon would collapse easily, then everyone

    steped on it would all fall into the valley.

    Here is my question, ”Will you do the dangerous behavior, just

    for taking some beautiful pictures?”

    Thanks for listening.

    參考資料: me
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