Emily 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

麻煩英文達人幫我修改英文短篇日記...

我英文很差...可以請大家幫我修改文法,和加入適當的片語嗎?

非常感激!!

*§§ EXTE:HairExtensions §§* January 29 . 28

Lately Ied the DVD of "EXTE". It's a horror film.

Thec movie described the dead body of a young girl which hair can

extensionand attakes people.

Yamazaki a morgue night watchman is sinister and aberrant personality,

he is a strange personage.

The movie character Yuko is a young wannbe hair stylist apprenticing at

hair salon.

She has long black hair is very pretty ,I like Yuko very much.

And, don't expect too much of this movie.

It's not enough horroible.

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  • 1 0 年前
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    *§§ EXTE:HairExtension§§* January 29 . 28

    Lately rent a horrid movie "EXTE"DVD .

    The movie was described a dead young girl, Yuko, whose long pretty black hair could extend unlimitedly and attack people. When she was alive, she wanna be a hair stylist. I like this character very much.

    Yamazaki, who was involved with the movie, was a watchman guard of morgue at night. He has sinister and aberrant personality.

    In short, don't expect you will get scared from this movie.

    It's not that horrible.

    2008-02-14 16:27:44 補充:

    Lately rent a horrid movie "EXTE".

    DVD不用寫啦

    口語說 RENT a movie就知道是DVD啦

    參考資料: Me, ME
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    Lv 4
    1 0 年前

    有點不是很懂你想要說的東西

    應該要用更英語式的寫法

    因為 感覺上你的寫法"很中文式"啦

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