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宏宏 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

請幫我看看我的英文興趣自傳~

我用自己認為的語法去寫的~

覺得有些錯誤~懇請指教以下的內容~

I have a variety of hobby. I like surfing the Net which can know some novel things

and get a lot of resources if I'd like to know some news.

I also like the ball game. For instance : Billiards,basketball. It can move the body and right to be in good health.

My favorite hobby is watching movies. Every time i ever watch,the movies are like

magic. They bring me to adventures with the charaters,laugh with the charters.

I just feel like i did all the things with them. It's a lot of fun.

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  • 1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    您的語法有一點問題喔!!!

    讓我幫您做修正分析。

    I have a variety of hobby.

    我可以了解您想說"我有很多種嗜好" 因為這裡是指許多的嗜好

    所以要去 "y" 加 "ies" 喔!

    I have a variety of hobbIES

    I like surfing the Net which can know some novel things

    其實最正確的說法應為 "I like to ......" 當然您這樣寫並不是問題。

    在 "can" 前面應該加 "I" , 不然美國人會誤認為是 "surfing the Net" can know some novel things (which doesn't not make any sense)

    novel things 會英文的人當然不會以為這裡的 "novel" 是指小說,但我給您一個建議,最好寫 newfangled news 如果您還是想寫 "things" 也是可以的 ,其實也可以改成 "knowlege"........

    所以這句我會改成 :

    I like to surfing ON the INTERnet which LET ME know some NEWFANGLED NEWS.

    下一句 "and get a lot of resources if I'd like to know some news. "

    我不大請楚您在說甚麼耶????

    其實我已經把您上一句改了,所以我想您只要再上一句尾加 "and lot of the resources."

    I like to surfing ON the INTERnet which LET ME know some NEWFANGLED NEWS and lot of the resources.

    您後面的 "if I'd like to know some news." 我完全無法暸解

    中文為 "如果我想去知道或得到一些新聞" 在這句是不需要加的(我是指英文方面)

    "I also like the ball game. For instance : Billiards,basketball. It can move the body and right to be in good health. "

    有很多種球類比賽 加"S" ....ball gameS

    "For instance" 最好改成 "For example" 比較口語化

    "Billiards,basketball " 只有兩個 把逗號去掉 加 "and" ......................billiards and basketball

    "It can move the body and right to be in good health. "

    有兩個運動 所以改成 "they"

    move =動 不等於 運動 ,應改為 : exercise

    "right to be in good health." 我個人的建議是寫成 "let me being in the good shape" 當然如果您一定想用" health" 的話,請改為 "and make me heathy.

    2008-02-21 08:32:36 補充:

    “My favorite hobby is watching movies. Every time i ever watch,the movies are like magic.”

    這句只有一個小錯 "I ever watchED" 他是完成試。

    "They bring me to adventures with the charaters,laugh with the charters."

    bring me to THE adventures .....

    記得加 "THE"

    2008-02-21 08:32:57 補充:

    我不清楚您說 "charters" 在說甚麼

    但我想這句 OK 了!!

    最後兩句不錯喔!!! 但,"It's a lot of fun." 應為"It WAS a lot of funS"

    好了沒問題了

    希望能幫助到您!!!!!

    2008-02-21 08:33:56 補充:

    我幫您整理一下:

    I have a variety of hobbies. I like to surf on the Internet which let me know some newfangled news and the resources. I also like the ball games. For example: Billiards and basketball.

    2008-02-21 08:34:45 補充:

    They can exercise the body and let me being in the good shape. My favorite hobby is watching movies. Every time I ever watched, the movies are like magic. They bring me to adventures with the characters, and laugh with the charters.

    2008-02-21 08:34:54 補充:

    I just feel like I did all the things with them. It was a lot of funs!!

    2008-02-21 08:40:40 補充:

    希望能幫助到您!!!!!

    參考資料: I lived in USA For More than 3 years, high School student
  • 1 0 年前

    I have a variety of hobbies. I like surfing the Net, which can show me some novel things and gives a lot of resources if I'd like to know the news.

    I also like ballgames, especially billiards and basketball.

    Sports can move the body and let me be in good health.

    My favorite hobby is watching movies.

    Every time I watch a movie, it is like magic.

    Movies let me have the adventures with the characters, and I laugh with the characters.

    I just feel like I did all the things in the movie with them.

    It's a lot of fun.

    以上改過的文法還算通順,以作者本身程度來改的!

    參考資料: 先生是美國白人大學教應用外語!
  • 1 0 年前

    先不談語法,基本上,我認為有二個[邏輯]必需考慮

    1.categorization(分類),你必須先將[興趣]與[休閒活動]分類,例如看電影是你休假時的[休閒活動]還是你平常每天的[興趣].

    2.supporting & evidence (佐證說明),如撞球與籃球是完全不相同的球類,也是完全不相同的[運動],但你沒有分開說明,卻僅一句[對健康有益]就帶過

    如果我是你,我的寫法是

    I have many ways to spend my leisure time, because my hobby is multifarious. I distinguish them into two categrries, indoor activities and outdoor sports.

    In raining days, I usually spend my time in internet. I can do some research which I interested. I also can read some articles and novels. From those...(請自行發揮對你有何益處)Sometimes, I also go theater if there has some movie interested me. My favorite movies are ...

    For the reason of keeping health, I do some sports in sunny day. Basketball is the one I like most. It's not only a sport, but also a team work.... Billiards is another actitivity I usually do. Even though it doesn't relate to health, I can recall my mathematics (trigonometric function) and physics (collision)....

    希望對你有幫助

    參考資料: 我自己
  • 1 0 年前

    i have a variety of hobbies. i like to surfing the web to read some online novels and search resources such as news and information.

    i also like sport, especially the sport which relates to a ball. For instance: billiards and basketball. it helps to maintian a good body condition and it is good for health.

    My favorite hobby is to watching movies. When i watch movies, i always get the gravitation toward to the movies. It is like magic that i feel i adventure with the charaters and laugh with them. It's a lot of fun.

    改了一點,看看行不行

    加油

    參考資料: 自己
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