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幫幫忙阿~英文自傳今天要交,錯誤很多,幫改一句是一句。20點

I am Feng Yi Ling. Bethony is my English name. I am now 17 years old, studying in a private high school. I There are five people in my family, and I am the second child among three.I am not the so-called spoiled child. My parents make very sure of that by training me to be independent. My sister is a university student and she is an open-minded person full of sense of humor. She certainly have great influence on me, I always look up to her.

Studying Process

My fondness for English is developed from my childhood. My mother knew that English is an important language, so she took me to calm school since I was little. Hance, I can always get good grades on my English tests. It makes me get more interest in English.

I have been to Sing Ga Po two months to study the language school there. During that time, I made friends with people from diffrent contry, we laught together, play together, and study to gether. I feel very lucky to have friends like them and also gained many different valuable experiences.

I hope I could have more experience like this in my future, I really like to meet different people and go to different contry. This is also the reason I want to major in English oral speaking and listening.

Throughout my school years, I have been produceing my academic continually. Espacially at the third year of senior high. That is the time, I decided to temporoly forget about anything and just antention on my studying. I done well on this. After getting the highlist goal in our class, I believe that there is nothing can't be done if someone really make up his mind.

and enjoy the team spirit we have

剩下的另一半,會再給20點

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對不起,另一半我發現只剩下10點,還是請好心人士幫幫忙~~!!

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  • 小羊
    Lv 6
    1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    您好 很高興為您解答問題..

    I am Feng Yi Ling, you can also call me Bethony. I am now 17 years old, studying in a private high school. I There are five members in my family, and I am the second child among three.I am not the so-called spoiled child; instead, i'm very independent. My sister is a university student and she is an open-minded person and full of sense of humor. She has so many positive effects great on me

    Studying Process

    I have shown the interests in English since i was a child. My mother has been awared that for communicating with people all over the world, English is going to be an important and basic language; therefore, she took me to calm school since I was kid. Hence, I can always get good grades on my English tests.(灰色字為畫蛇添足部分) It makes me get more interest in English.

    I have been to Singarpore for two months to study the language school there. During that time, I had met and experienced different people from different country, and made friends with people from diffrent contry, we laught together, play together, and study to gether. I feel very lucky to have friends like them and also gained many different valuable experiences. I am very looking forward to have more experience like this.

    I really like to meet different people and go to different contry.

    For learning and knowing more about English, I'm going to major in English oral speaking and listening.

    Throughout my school years, I have been continually produceing my academic, espacially at the third year of senior high, That is the time, I decided to temporarily forget about anything, and emphasizing on my studying. I done well on this. Later on, I got the highest score in my class, and I believe that there is nothing can't be done if someone really make up his mind.

    and enjoy the team spirit we have

    黃色底線為..好像跟英文有關..卻又不知道你在說什麼或者為何你說這些..下半部我幫你改ㄌ.

    整篇文章,沒有一個架構, 不夠有說服力, 有說服力的部分也沒有佐證, 或者不夠客觀, 不過你沒時間了..所以只能祝福你了

    希望你如願推上你想要ㄉ學校囉,加油

    學英文的路漫長 不管有沒有上,我都希望你別放棄

    有問題可以隨時寫信問我.

    參考資料: 美國的台裔
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  • 1 0 年前

    大致上寫得很好喔,我找到一些錯誤,還有把一些地方改得通順一些

    1. 大學生是 undergraduate

    so it should be-----My sister is an undergraduate and she is an open-minded person with a great sense of humor.

    She certainly "has" a profound influence on me, I always look up to her.

    My fondness for English developed since my childhood.

    "Hence", I can always get good grades on my English tests. It makes me become more interested in English.

    新加坡=Singapore

    have spent two months studying in a language school in Singapore.

    diffrent contry--->different countries 我想這裡用複數較好

    we laughed together, played together, and studied together.

    I feel very lucky to have friends like them, because we shared many different invaluable experiences.

    This is also the reason I want to major in English, especially oral speaking and listening.

    Throughout my school years, I have been very productive. Espacially during the third year of senior high, I decided to forget about anything temporarily and just focus on my studying, and I did really well. After getting into the honor roll in our class, I believe that you can achieve anything if you set your mind to it.

    and enjoy our team spirit

    希望有幫到你的忙,其實我也還有很多地方要學習,一起加油吧!

    參考資料: 我現在住美國
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