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Tom Higgins opened a new restaurant, Underground Grill, at Benson University. He tried his best to run the restaurant. First, he spent a lot of time looking for the best location then he hired workers to paint the restaurant. He also hired cooks and waitresses to help him. For providing the customers a good place to eat, he made many rules in the restaurant. Unfortunately, his restaurant still couldn’t operate very well. The problem is that he overpaid for the workers because he wanted to open the restaurant as quickly as possible. When the restaurant opened, he didn’t have enough money to do the advertising. Besides, he hired the students to do the cooking. Without the professional cook, the food there is not delicious and is also similar to other restaurants around the university.

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If Tom Higgins wants to start his restaurant all over again, here are three referable solutions to the problem are moving to another place to cut down the rent and do some advertising, hiring the professional cook and create the unique and special menu, and cancel the rules to the customers.

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  • 1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    Generally speaking, your composition is quite well,

    and so I only make some suggestions for you.

    Hope you will like the changes I have considered for better usages.

    1.

    First of all, he spent a lot of time looking for

    the best location, and then he hired workers to

    paint the restaurant. In addition, he hired cooks

    and waitresses to help him.

    To provide a comfortable place for customers,

    he has made up many rules about eating in his restaurant.

    2.

    Unfortunately, his restaurant still couldn’t

    run very smoothly and make good profits.

    When the restaurant opened, he didn’t have

    extra money to advertise for his restaurant.

    Without the professional cooking skills, the food there

    is not delicious and quite similar to other

    restaurantsaround the university campus.

    3.

    If Tom Higgins wants to start his restaurant

    all over again, here are three referable solutions

    to the problems.

    4.

    First, he needs to relocate his

    restaurant and cut down the rent budget

    to saveextra money for the advertisement.

    Secondly, hiring the professional cook and

    create a unique and exceptional menu

    to attract customers is essential as well.

    Finally, which is the most important of all,

    is to cancel all the bothering regulations

    he has scared away the customers.

    Have fun writing!

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  • saku
    Lv 5
    1 0 年前

    基本上文法還不錯,有的地方不用加the。還有就是時態不統一,再來就是有的句子太長,需要加標點。我只打出改過的句子。

    He spent a lot of time looking for the best location and hired workers to paint the restaurant。

    In order to provide customers an enjoyable place to eat, he made many rules in the restaurant。Unfortunately, his restaurant did not go well。The problem is that he paid too much to the workers as he wanted to start the business as soon as possible。He did not have enough money to advertise the restaurant when he opened it。Moreover,he hired students to cook。 Without professional cook, food there was not delicious and was similar to other restaurants around the university as well。

    If Tom Higgins wants to start his restaurant all over again, 3 ways are helpful to solve the problem。He can change the location of the restaurant to cut down rent fees and then advertise the restaurant。 Next, he needs to hire a professional cook and create unique and special menu and finally, he has to cancel the rules on customers。

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