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匿名使用者 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

這短文有錯嗎?

包括逗號,片語,關代,句型等等.

My kite is round and it is green and white,

it has 2 horns in the front ,

and it also has 2 tails in the back,

when it is flying,the tails can move.

This kite like an animal ,but I don't know what is it,maybe a cow?

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此篇是小女孩在形容她的風箏像某種動物.

This kite like an animal ,but I don't know what is it,maybe a cow?

這句在文法上有錯嗎?

最主要想問的是文法.

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  • 1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    My kite is round in shape and it is green and white one(指”my kite”),

    It has 2 horns in the front, and it also has 2 tails in the back,

    主詞及動詞(It has)盡量不要重複, 建議合成一個句子

    It has 2 horns in the front and 2 tails in the back,

    when it is flying, the(its) tails can move(用” wave”會比較傳神點)

    因為前一句用is flying, 建議後一句也用同形式.

    When it is flying, its tails are waving in the wind.

    或用”直述句”

    When it flies, its tails can wave in the wind.

    This kite like an animal, but I don't know~

    But需對等同形式的句子, 且like解釋作”像”是介系詞要配合動詞, 如”look like ”或”is like”

    This kite looks like an animal, but I don't know (+子句 S+V )what it is , maybe, a cow.

    這裡的”a cow”和”what it is”是同位語

    maybe建議和”a cow”分開, 因為副詞直接加名詞不太恰當, 但其實也是可以的啦

    參考資料: 靠自己一句一字幫你更正
  • My kite is round, and it is green and white, (綠色的? 牛?)

    It has 2 horns in the front, (也可以用 it has got ... / possesses)

    and it has 2 tails in the back, (also 不必要)

    when it is flying,the tails will move. (用can很怪因為他怎樣都可以動)

    This kite like an animal, but I don't know what is it,maybe a cow?

    最後一句是有點怪: This kite, like an animal, makes me question myself what it is. It might be a cow.

    參考資料: myself
  • 1 0 年前

    只有最後一句修改一下就好了, This kite looks like an animal, but I dont know what is it, maybe it's a cow.

    2008-04-22 16:24:48 補充:

    文法有點不太對, 因為這是3個短句拚成的1句話, 第一句是

    這個風箏看起來像一種動物, 所以要寫This kite looks like an animal

    但我不知道是什麼, but I dont know what is it

    可能是一隻牛, maybe it's a cow

    參考資料: 自己, 自己
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