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Tornado Katrina

Three years ago, there was a very shocking things happened. The tornado Katrina maul heavily on South America, especially, Louisianan. Tornado is a very general weather phenomenon, but not thins one. Katrina was a very strong tornado, the max winds was around 150 kts. that was very horrible.

The residents did not even have any times to prepare their stuff. The only things they could do was just run. The telephone had no signal, and people could easily heard women and children scream on the road. It was very emergency. Everyone were afraid and astonished.

Louisianan was the disastrous province. Four hundred thousand people got power disconnection. There were on less 56 people die. There did not have any warning and any precaution measure. So, when the tornado was happening, the most residents were got strait in their own house. Everywhere got flood. They could not move out to find any safer shelter.

After the tornado stopped, the residents need to move immediately. The flood still there, so they could not move out ant furnitures or any valuable stuffs. They almost lost everything. In that time, I think the most valuable things were their family. If everything was fine but the house. That was easy to just start again. Without the family, everything could become very hard.

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  • 1 0 年前
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    Tornado Katrina

    Three years ago, a terrible thing was happened. The tornado of Katrina heavily attacked on South America, especially for Louisianan. Tornado is a kind of general weather phenomenon, but it always damage things. Katrina was a very strong tornado, the max wind was around 150 kts(knots per hour). It was so horrible.

    People did not even have any time to prepare their stuff. The only thing they could do was run. The telephone had no signal and people could easily heard women and children scream on the road. It was emergent. Everyone was panic and astonished.

    Louisianan was the disastrous province. Four hundred thousand of people got power disconnection. There were on less 56 people die. When the tornado was happening, there was not any warning and any precaution notice; most of residents were got strait in their own house naturally. Everywhere was got flood. They could not find any safer shelter to migrate.

    After the tornado stopped, the residents need to migrate immediately. The flood still there, they could not move any furniture or any valuable stuff. They almost lost everything. At that moment, I think the most valuable things were their family. If anything was broken. Those were easy to start again, but we could not fix for family. Without the family, everything will become harder.

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  • Elisa
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    1 0 年前

    #1 Calico's correction is very good. "The only thing they could do was trying to escape from the hurricane" is right.

  • 1 0 年前

    calico 翻的很讚

    不過 [The only thing they could do was trying to escape from the hurricane] 裡的 trying 是否改為 try 或 to try 會更好?

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