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幫我修改我的英文作文

My parent's And I Attitude Toward Something <-- 我定的題目

第一段Everytimes, when I attitude toward something that I always cant not to clam down, and to consider carefully, so I often do not know how to face or to resolve one thing, sometimes, if I usually to give up easily when I have problems. However, I am so angry when my friends or parents give some suggest or critize to me, of course, they often can give you some suggest to help you, so I know I have not a good attitude to toward something usually.

第二段But, my parents are very different from me, usually, they have a good attitude toward something, because they always consider carefully a lot of things, after all, they already have many experience in their life, so they will be more carefull and mature to solve anything. Morever, they have different experience to know how to attitude toward something or problems. On the contrast, I have not a lot of experience to face the difficult and do not know how right to solve the problems in the ways.

第三段Finally, I must accept any critize or suggest from my parents or friends, and to know how I to improve my attitude when I face the something. I believe I will be more mature and good attitude to toward things.

希望英文高手的大大幫我修改或是跟我說哪裡的文法錯誤!!

還有定的題目不好的話也順便幫我改正!

我寫的題目意思是:你跟你雙親所面對事情的態度差別

我的老師給我評語是... 文法句法遭透了~

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那在請問一下

什麼時後用I have not...

什麼時候用I do not have...

這兩者有一樣嗎?

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  • Elisa
    Lv 7
    1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    I provided two versions of corrections. One is to correct your grammar only. I have provided explanation on the grammar errors. The other one is to provide a better English usage.

    How my parents and I react to things

    For better English usage, I would rewrite it like this:

    Often I was unable to calm down or think carefully before I acted towards something and consequently ended up resolving nothing. Hence, I usually gave up easily when I had problems. In addition, I tend to get angry with my friends or parents when they gave me suggestions or criticism. I knew that my reactions were usually bad, considering the suggestions they provided me.

    My parents are very different from me. They usually handled things with good attitudes, taking in consideration of many things carefully. After all, they have a life time of experiences, so they are more careful and mature in solving things. Moreover, they are experienced in handling things and solving problems. On the contrary, I do not have a lot of experiences to face difficulties and do not know the right ways to solve the problems.

    To improve my attitude towards handling problems, I should accept any criticism or suggestion from my parents or friend. In doing so, I will become more mature with a better attitude toward things.

    To correct your grammar only:

    Every time, when I acted toward something, I always could not calm down and consider carefully. I often did not know how to face or to resolve something. Sometimes, I usually gave up easily when I had problems. However, I was very angry when my friends or parents gave some suggestions or criticism to me. Of course, they often gave you suggestions to help you, so I knew that I did not have a good attitude handling stuff.

    My parents are very different from me. Usually, they have a good attitude toward things because they always consider a lot of things carefully.

    - to be continued -

    2008-05-01 03:31:47 補充:

    After all, they have had many experiences in life, so they will be more careful and mature to solve things. Moreover, they have different experience to know how to act towards something or problems.

    - to be continued -

    2008-05-01 03:32:20 補充:

    On the contrary, I do not have a lot of experience to face difficulty and do not know the right way to solve the problems.

    I should accept any criticism or suggestion from my parents or friends to improve my attitude towards problems.

    2008-05-01 03:32:36 補充:

    I believe in doing so, I will be more mature and able to develop a better attitude when handling things.

    ** You don’t need “that” because you already have “when” to connect the two sentences.

    ** You don’t need “to” before “calm” or before “consider” because “cannot” is an auxiliary verb.

    2008-05-01 03:32:53 補充:

    ** don’t use “if”. This is not a conditional sentence. 不是假設語氣

    ** suggest, criticize are both verbs. You should use nouns here.

    ** attitude is a noun. You should use “act”, which is a verb.

    ** contrast is 對比. You should use “contrary”, which is 相反的

    2008-05-02 02:36:38 補充:

    什麼時後用I have not...

    什麼時候用I do not have...

    這兩者有一樣嗎?

    No.

    have not + v. (pp): used in present perfect tense

    I have not talked to him for a long time.

    I have not seen it before.

    have + n

    I do not have a car. I do not have any knowledge of that.

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    參考資料: Myself. Studied English abroad at the age of 11 with over 32 years of experience speaking and writing English. Tutored English as an Undergrad. A project manager in the US since 1992., Myself. Studied English abroad at the age of 11 with over 32 years of experience speaking and writing English. Tutored English as an Undergrad. A project manager in the US since 1992., Myself. Studied English abroad at the age of 11 with over 32 years of experience speaking and writing English. Tutored English as an Undergrad. A project manager in the US since 1992., Myself. Studied English abroad at the age of 11 with over 32 years of experience speaking and writing English. Tutored English as an Undergrad. A project manager in the US since 1992., Myself. Studied English abroad at the age of 11 with over 32 years of experience speaking and writing English. Tutored English as an Undergrad. A project manager in the US since 1992.
  • ?
    Lv 5
    1 0 年前

    Elisa

    good job!

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