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急!改一小段英文文章

請各位英文高手

幫我改下列這一小段文章

包括文法句構還有邏輯!!感恩

After the first contact with computers, I realized what a powerful status Microsoft got in information technology. It soon occurred to me that as long as I had been rich like Bill Gates, I would have been the happiest person in the world for fulfilling my whole dreams above. Nevertheless, it obviously appears that Bill Gates is under pressure more than relaxed, spending most parts of his life thinking about how to maintain his position as a behemoth in the IT industry.

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  • 1 0 年前
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    這裡是我幫你改完的,你本來寫的就以經不錯了,所以我並沒有修正很多,

    可以參考看看。

    After the first contact with computers, I realized that the power of status Microsoft got in information technology. It soon occurred to me that as long as I had been rich like Bill Gates, I would have been the happiest person in the world for fulfilling my whole dreams above. Nevertheless, it obviously appears that Bill Gates is under pressure more, spending most parts of his life thinking about how to maintain his position as a behemoth in the IT industry.

    希望有幫助!!!

    參考資料: 英國留學生
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