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幫我挑英文文章的錯誤

I appreciated my English teacher, in spite of her harder teaching, I still hammer at English. I’m happy and don’t have any stress to learn English by considered that vocation scholastic English isn’t difficult than high scholastic it. Though my English grade isn’t excellent, I’m blessed to enjoy it.

Learning English not only can’t with languorous and abhorrent but I’m glad that lets me do it cheerfully and decide choose Commercial English whichever college or university. I have a dislike for others subject but Commercial English which can makes my collegiate life abound with abundance and splendid. I can reveal my outstanding capable on work in the future.

I’ve ever was on cheer squad team, joined ping-pong club and appreciate- literature club. I’ve ever performed at a few elhi schools. I often exercise hardly more because had performs. I dropped out cheer squad team because my mom hoped I can focus on my study. But I got treasurable experience during that time which makes me be an extravert and self-confident more and more. I don’t regret to joined the cheer squad team, but makes me am not fear to face strangers and crowd instead.

We don’t know tomorrow will be how; it’s that so-called “Never too late to learn.” Learning is on of my goals. “Knowledge is power.” Own knowledge is meaning in my life, be succeed by step by step to do everything, so I’ll learn hardly everything that makes me will have competitive advantage in the future.

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  • Elisa
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    1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    Please see below for corrections on grammar errors, English usage and word redundancy.

    I appreciated my English teacher. In spite of her hard teaching, I still did poorly in English. I’m happy and don’t have any stress in learning English since English taught in vocation school isn’t as difficult as that taught in high school. Though my English grade isn’t excellent, I still enjoy it.

    I’ve been on cheer squad team, joined ping-pong club and literature appreciation club. I’ve even performed at a few elhi schools. I often exercised hard in order to perform. I dropped out of cheer squad team because my mom hoped that I could focus on my study.

    Learning English is not only interesting but pleasant. Due to that, I have decided to choose Commercial English as my college major. I have a dislike for other subject but Commercial English, which can make my collegiate life full of abundance and splendid. I can reveal my outstanding capability at work in the future.

    But I got treasurable experience during that time, and became an extravert with increasing self-confidence. I don’t regret joining the cheer squad team because it helps me to face strangers and crowd without fear.

    We don’t know what tomorrow will become. My goal is to learn all the time as knowledge is power and it is never too late to learn. Building knowledge is important to be successful in life and to have a competitive advantage in the future.

    Please see below for explanation on the corrections.

    “hammer” means: to make persistent or laborious attempts to finish or perfect something. So this is not the right word to be used here.

    See http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/hammer

    Since you used the phrase “in spite of”, the following sentence needs to reflect a contrary result.

    For example: In spite of all the rain that had fallen, the ground was still pretty dry.

    2008-05-30 20:03:48 補充:

    Use “hard” instead of “harder” because you are not comparing her teaching to anything else here.

    “to learn” means “am going to learn” or “in order to learn”, so the usage is incorrect. You should use “in learning”.

    2008-05-30 20:04:19 補充:

    "By considered that” is wrong, should be “by considering that”. However, I would use the word “since” or “because” since you are stating a reason.

    There is no such usage as “vocation scholastic English” and “high scholastic”.

    2008-05-30 20:04:43 補充:

    Don’t use “I’m blessed” here, it means to bestow good of any kind upon

    For example: I am blessed with fortune. I am blessed to be alive from the fire.

    2008-05-30 20:05:02 補充:

    Learning English is a subject, so you need a verb before the adjective. I use the word “interesting”, because judging from your sentence, it is a positive thing. So your usage of “languorous” and “abhorrent” is incorrect.

    2008-05-30 20:05:31 補充:

    In addition, since Learning English is the subject, and you use the phrase “not only … but”, the subject leading the phrase “but” is “Learning English” and not “I”

    Languorous = lacking spirit or liveliness, 懶倦的, 無精打采的

    For example: a hot languorous afternoon

    Abhorrent = Disgusting, 可恨的, 可惡的, 令人作嘔的

    2008-05-30 20:06:00 補充:

    Use “to” infinitive to connect two verbs in a sentence => “decide” to “choose”.

    I use the word “full of” instead of “abound with” to avoid duplication with the word “abundance”.

    Abundance (n.) = wealth, 富裕

    Splendid (n.) 燦爛

    2008-05-30 20:08:00 補充:

    Why can learning Commercial English make your collegiate life full of wealth and splendor? You need to state the reason.

    參考資料: Myself. Went abroad at age 11. With 32 years experience speaking and writing English. Tutored English as an Undergrad. A project manager in the US since 1992., Myself. Went abroad at age 11. With 32 years experience speaking and writing English. Tutored English as an Undergrad. A project manager in the US since 1992.
  • 1 0 年前

    I appreciated my English teacher, in spite of her (tough) teaching, I still hammer at English (now). I'm happy and don't have any stress (about) (learning) English by (considering) that vocation scholastic English isn't difficult than (the one of) high school . Though my English grade isn’t excellent, I’m blessed to enjoy it.

    (I'm glad that) learning English (is) not only (not) languorous and abhorrent but (let) me do it cheerfully ,(as a result, I) decide (to) choose Commercial English (in) whichever college or university. I have a dislike for ( subjects) but Commercial English which can makes my collegiate life (is) (abundant) and splendid. (and) I can reveal my outstanding (capability) on work in the future.

    I've ever (joined) (a cheer squad ), ping-pong club and (literature-appreciated) club. I've ever performed at a few elhi schools. I often (exercised) (harder) (for that). I dropped out (of) (the cheer squad later) because my mom hoped I can focus on my study. But I got treasurable experience (that made) me (became be more) extravert and self-confident . I don't regret (that I) joined the (cheer squad) (for it made) me (did) not fear to face strangers and crowd instead.

    We don't know (what will happen) tomorrow; (and) it's (said) “Never too late to learn.” (so) (learning) is (my way to reach) goals. “Knowledge is power.” Own knowledge is meaning in my life (to do everything ) (step by step successfully) , so I'll learn everything ( hardly,) (and) that (will) (make) me (more competitive) in the future.

    2008-05-30 22:18:12 補充:

    括符內為修正處,上逗點出現亂碼,請小心看。

  • 1 0 年前

    中式英文, 不合文法喔..

    中式英文,沒半法抓準文意. 要改的話, 會出現很多種版本.

    這根本不是英文作文, 你/妳不如用中文把你/妳的意思表達出來

    讓大家幫你/妳翻成英文比較快

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