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急,20點,英文作文文法

能不能幫我改一下文法,寫完以後覺得有點不順但是又不知道該如何修改,謝謝: )

There are three people in my home, my father, my mother, and me. My father is a nightwatchman, he is work hard for money and let me can go learning in school, he also teach me computer when I was just eight years old. My mother is a nice person who always listen to me, and cook the food which is delicious and healthy. She also care of my father and me, in my view, home is a place which has warm and love.

If my family is old, will I bring they to the nursing home? In fact, my family ever talk with me of this question. They think if they were too old to care of themselves, they want to going to the nursing home. But in my opinion, most nursing home is not good, they didn’t consideration for their residents and didn’t give they a nice environment to live. So, if I have to send them to the nursing home, I will take then to the nice place, which has the beautiful garden, many activities, the nice nurses and nice room-mate.

If I was old, too. I will going to that nursing home, too, and didn’t bring problem to my children.

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    There are three members in my home - my father, mother and me. My father is a night guard. He works hard for a living and provides me a better education. He teaches me how to use the computer when I was just eight years old. My mother is a lovely person who always listens to me and cooks delious and healthy meals for the family. She takes good care of my father and me. I feels that my home is a place full of warmth and love.

    Once, my family talked about this question - when my parents get old, would I send them to the nursing home? They think when they are too old to care of themselves, they want to live at the nursing home. But in my opinion, most nursing homes are not good enough, they do not considerate for their residents nor provide a nice environment to live. So, if I have to send them to the nursing home, I will find them a nice one where has a beautiful garden, many activities, kind nurses and nice roommates.

    When I get old, I would go to the nursing home too as I do not want to become a problem to my children.

    2008-06-10 00:01:53 補充:

    1. people ->member 成員. 用people好像是指不認識的人, 用member指家庭成員

    2. he is work hard -> he works hard (work是動詞, 第三人稱加 s)

    2008-06-10 00:02:23 補充:

    3. let me can go learning in school 意思是提供你好的教育, 所以我將你的句子修改為 provides me a better education (你的父親提供 provide 第三人稱加 s)

    2008-06-10 00:02:41 補充:

    4. he also teach -> teaches (同上)

    5. my mother listens, cooks, takes care of (第三人稱加 s)

    2008-06-10 00:06:35 補充:

    6. 第二段的前兩句, 我做了一點調整, 讓文章流暢一點.

    7.most nursing home is... 改為複數, 因你指大部份的nursing home, 多於一家, 加s

    2008-06-10 00:08:36 補充:

    更正...delious --> delicious

    2008-06-10 00:10:29 補充:

    更正There are three members in my home-->There are three members in my family 我家裡有三個成員

    2008-06-10 03:39:51 補充:

    He teaches me how to use the computer when I was just eight years old.

    ---> 改為過去式 he taught me ...

    2008-06-10 03:41:47 補充:

    更正:

    They do not considerate (形容詞) --> 改為 They do not consider (動詞) ...

    參考資料: myself + SL
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