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麻煩幫忙改英文作文(20點)

如題

希望有人可以幫忙改,距離指考剩幾天,開始練歷屆考題

之前是拿給老師改,但這幾天不太容易找到老師,而且老師改的速度也有限

麻煩高手給些建議或修正文法上的錯誤

以下為92年指考作文,各段第一句為指定主題句,滿分為20分

(如能以此標準打個分數更好,可嚴格一點.因為是限時模擬考試,打的時候發現許多錯誤但沒有更正,請列入計分)

(我曾被老師說過我寫的是Chinese English, 如果有這種狀況請務必要指出)

(每段前四點只是因為多個空白無法顯示,才用這個方法取代)

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.... Exams of all kinds have become a necessary part of my high school life. Althoug I sometimes feel tired of taking them, there's no denying that it's the simplist and the most objective way to know what I have learned. From time to time the exams schedule is too intense to follow, but I think it can evoke my potential, and makes me use finite time properly.

.... The most unforgettable wxam I have ever taken is a physic midterm exam. My physic grades had been very poor until I entered the third grade of senior high, which was the time I have started to make significant processing on it. I had performed well on many small tests, so I was confident that I would get good grades on the midterm exam. But I was so uncareful on the exam that I made many unexpectedly faults. When I received my poor grade, I even bursted into tears. That's the first time I considerated the grades so important because I had really spent a lot of time on it. With this unforgettable memory, I realized that besides hard work, it also takes deliberation to perform well on the exam.

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感謝003和尚端湯上塔塔滑湯灑湯燙塔, 另請教一下

I always got poor grades on my physic tests since I was in the third grade of senior high, which was an important period I have started to make greatt progress on it.

這句我覺得把since改成until比較符合我的原意, 不知是否合文法?

如果是用since恐怕有矛盾?

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因為我本來的意思是"我的物理成績一向很不好, 直到高三才有了顯著的進步"

(後來因為自此在小考表現一直不錯, 有了自信, 但卻在期中考因為粗心栽了跟頭)

謝謝你仔細的評分, 不過可能真的太高了(平常老師都只給我9~11分, 學測也只有13)

我的單字量已經很少, 所以我希望若來不及增加單字量, 至少能加強用字的正確性

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感謝001~GothicHand~的建議, 這些也是老師常跟我們說的

但我目前的目標的確只是拿到"穩定的基本分"而已, 不要求能有什麼文采或特色

我對國文作文可能比較有這種企圖...

作文19分好強!!!!!

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感謝002Wendy, 另請教

That's the first time I considerated the grades as the most important thing because I really spent a lot of time on it.

這句似乎有點誇張? 將成績視為最重要的事?

我不知道我有沒有理解錯誤, 但我的原意是"這是我第一次如此看重成績, 因為我為此花了許多時間"

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although是不小心打錯, 不好意思^^"

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  • 1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    .... All kinds of exams have become a necessary part of my high school life. Although I sometimes feel tired of taking them, there's no denying that it's the simplist and the most objective way to know what I have learned. From time to time the exam schedule is too intense to follow, but I think it can evoke my potential, and makes me use limited time properly.

    .... The most unforgettable exam I have ever taken is a physic mid-term exam.I always got poor grades on my physic tests since I was in the third grade of senior high, which was an important period I have started to make greatt progress on it. I performed well on many quizzes, so I was confident that I would get good grades on the midterm exam. Because of the uncarefulness on the exam , I made many unexpected faults. When I knew my poor grades, I even bursted into tears. That's the first time I cared about the grades so much . With this unforgettable memory, I realized that besides hard work, it also takes deliberation to perform well on the exams.

    內容( 3.5分)、組織( 3 分)、文法與句構( 3 分)、字彙與拼字( 3 分)、體例( 3 分)

    總分15.5分 可能太高

    看完你的文章

    我覺得你寫的算不錯

    錯誤率算少

    只是有些句子可以不用那麼複雜!!

    可以用多一些更有深度的單字

    但要確定其正確性!!

    2008-06-26 09:58:26 補充:

    Not until I was in the third grade of senior high did I start to get good grades.

    參考資料: ME中高級通過, ME
  • ?
    Lv 5
    1 0 年前

    Taking all kinds of exams becomes my routine in high school. Although sometimes I am sick of them, there's no denying that it's the simplist and the fairest way to prospect what we learn at school. Since exams schedule are always intensive and tight, it is able to evoke my potential and let me know how to spare my time to study effectively.

    The most unforgettable exam I have taken is a physic mid-term exam. My physic grades had been very poor until I was a senior student in high school. It was the time I have started to make significant processing on it. I performed well on many quizzes, and I became confident and positive. After that, I was getting better grades on my exams. But sometimes I was so uncareful on the exam that I made many unexpected mistakes. Once, When I received my poor grades, I almost bursted into tears. That's the first time I considerated the grades as the most important thing because I really spent a lot of time on it. With this unforgettable memory, I recognized that deliberation and carefulness to perform well on the exam is the key to success.

    2008-06-25 11:24:31 補充:

    其中 "&#39" 就是 is (這可能是電腦無法辨識的亂碼所致)

    參考資料: Me, English teacher
  • ﹟9
    Lv 5
    1 0 年前

    Okay...

    Though your writting style is differ from mine. I would say you could get a solid 13~15 points.

    You're storyline is fluent, you barely have any uneccassary words&character...But the thing is that there is no climax in your writting.

    You've just wrote a typical every-student-can-do kind of example.There is no speciality.

    Notice that the teachers who examine you paper, has to examine hundreds thousands of papers...so not only you need to care about your grammer...but you also have to care about your creativity & speciality...

    You're essay has to really catch their eyes...and by achieving so...you will get higher grades.

    參考資料: ME (指考英文前0.l%.....作文19...)
  • 1 0 年前

    第2句的although拼錯ㄌ@@

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