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幫我改作文Electricity

幫我改作文Electricity

你能想像一個沒有電(electricity)的世界嗎?請寫一篇文章,第一段描述我們的世界沒有了電以後,會是甚麼樣子,第二段說明這樣的世界是好是壞,並舉例解釋原因。

It is honor for me to discuss with you how life without electricity could be. No one can deny that we will at a loss what to do without electricity. And our life must be tedious and monotonous. I couldn’t chat with people by msn. My brother might feel bored because he couldn’t play online games and we don’t have TVs, electricity lights and air-conditioners.

But It is time for us to economize on electricity. A point of sorrow may be a point of joy. I have always believed that the one who has begun to live more seriously within begins to live more simply without. In the age of extravagance and waste, I wish I could show to the world how few the real wants of humanity are.

Use the electricity appropriately. The problem at issue is how to fulfill the country’s energy needs without harming the environment. To be brief (to the subject,) the most critical construction for conservation today is increased public awareness and education.

各位大大~seriously不是副詞嗎?[請用ctrl+F尋找]可是我覺得他應該放形容詞(因為他不可缺啊)

But It is time for us to economize on electricity.(還是用economize the use of electricity) 比較好

how life要不要改成how the life

is increased public awareness為什麼有d

可否幫我找出文法上的漏洞,以及他可能得的分數!在下感激不盡~

已更新項目:

http://lwcool.com/zw/newsfile/2006/4/7/200647_lwco...

我篤信,內心初步領悟到生活的真諦,方能開始更為平淡的外在生活.在這個奢侈浪費的時代裡,但願我能讓世人明白人性真正的需求是何等之少.

喔喔~搔頭

這是我英文課本中的選文,出自於海明威的文章,我不會寫英文所以就拼拼湊湊他的第五段 但我不知道這樣拼湊的文章會不會導致

文不對主詞還是文法問題.....

另外A point of sorrow may be a point of joy

=一則以憂一則以喜

謝謝你花時間在我身上

2 個已更新項目:

是的~我原來就想用第一人稱了

3 個已更新項目:

你的文章真的很切實

然而我仍不明白為何不用

at a loss what to do

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    It is an honor for me to discuss about how life could be without electricity. No one can deny that we will be incapable of doing many things without electricity; our lives must be tedious and monotonous. I couldn’t chat with people by msn. My brother might be bored, because he couldn’t play online games and watch TV.

    However, it is time for us to economize on electricity.A point of sorrow may be a point of joy (這是什麼?) I have always believed that the one who has begun to live more seriously within begins to live more simply without.(這句的問題很大 我沒改 你重寫比較好 因為我看不懂)Among the extravagance and waste, I wish I could show the world how few the real wants of humanity are.(用中文解釋一下 how few the real wants of humanity are 是想說什麼)

    Economize the electricity appropriately. The problem is how to generate the sufficient energy for the inhabitants in a country without harming the environment. To be brief (to the subject,) the most critical construction for conservation today has increased public awareness.

    第二段請你解釋一下比較好

    我再幫你改

    另外 這篇如果不是演講稿的話就要小心點了

    因為你用了蠻多第一人稱的方式來描寫這篇文章

    2008-06-28 23:16:43 補充:

    用課本的文的確是個好方法 但是不用自己的想法而硬翻的話就沒意思了

    那我就幫你翻吧

    2008-06-28 23:53:38 補充:

    我篤信,內心初步領悟到生活的真諦,方能開始更為平淡的外在生活.在這個奢侈浪費的時代裡,但願我能讓世人明白人性真正的需求是何等之少.

    I believe that perceiving the true essence of life helps to commence a mediocre routine. Among the extravagance and waste, I hope that mankind will be aware of their requirement is much more less than they need.

    2008-06-28 23:53:55 補充:

    功力不到 沒辦法幫你把 但願我能讓世人明白人性真正的需求是何等之少.

    這句翻好

    2008-06-28 23:58:16 補充:

    A point of sorrow may be a point of joy

    這個你就留著好了 因為我不太知道 一則以憂一則以喜 要怎麼翻

    2008-06-29 00:01:50 補充:

    寫文章最好用第三人稱喔

    不過既然你想用第一人稱那就算了

    2008-06-29 00:03:59 補充:

    at a loss what to do 不用的原因是因為我看不懂 再加上這樣寫很奇怪

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