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I disagree that the collage years are the best time in a person’s life. There are several reasons to support my perspectives. Collage students are forced to pass a lot of credits during educating period as well as they do not have enough time to earn plenty of money by themselves. I do not think all of collage students can adapt to their circumstance because they have to their best against a lot of invisible pressures.

Firstly, collage students have a lot of invisible pressures. They have to pass a lot of examines, passing all of the courses to get degrees. Students have to revise or cram for many tests so that they have a lot of pressures during these periods. Moreover, they have to chose their major and minor in their school. Many of them do not know what kind of curriculum does them really like. For instance, they are forced to determine their majors and minors within the limited time due to the rule of school. Nobody feels happy when they do anything under the pressure.

Secondly, many of them do not have enough time to earn money. A lot of students rely on their own parents because they do not have ability to afford their tuition. For example, if they want to buy some extra gismos, they have to think reasonable causes to persuasive them. They cannot purchase thing randomly until they have their jobs in the future. Meanwhile, they cannot fail any tests. If they flunked examine, they have to figure out a better reason to tell their parents.

In my view, being collage students have plenty of restrictions and limited rule. Being these reason, I hope I can graduate form my school as quickly as possible. I do not busy just because of passing examines. Moreover, I hope I can buy anything without asking my parents anymore.

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  • Shelly
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    1 0 年前
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    I disagree that the COLLEGE years are the best time in a person’s life. There are several reasons to support my perspectives. COLLEGE students are forced to pass a lot of credits as well as they do not have enough time to earn plenty of money by themselves. I do not think all COLLEGE students can adapt to their circumstance because they have to DO their best UNDER a lot of invisible pressures.

    第一段:

    (1) COLLEGE應該這樣拼

    (2)during educating period 似乎是多餘的 因為已經有說是COLLEGE STUDENTS

    Firstly, COLLEGE students have MANY invisible pressures. They have to pass a lot of EXAMS (EXAMINATIONS) to get degrees. Students have to revise or cram for many tests; THEREFORE, they have a lot of pressures during THIS PERIOD. Moreover, they have to CHOOSE their majorS and minorS in their school. Many of them do not know what kind of curriculum THEY really like. For instance, (they are forced to determine their majors and minors within the limited time due to the rule of school.) Nobody feels happy when they do anything under the pressure.

    第二段:

    (1) 把A LOT OF替換掉,這樣才不會聽起來有重覆感

    (2)passing all of the courses是多餘的,因為pass a lot of exam就是PASS ALL OF THE COURSES.

    (3)A so that B: A是達到B的目的,與文意不合

    (4) college years是一個階段

    (5)括號起來的地方好像不是一個例子....,只重覆了被迫選擇主修的窘境

    2008-08-02 17:04:24 補充:

    Secondly, many of them do not have enough time to earn money. A lot of students rely on their parents because they do not have THE ability to afford their tuition. For example, if they want to buy some extra gismos, they have to think OF reasonable EXCUSES to persuasive THEIR PARENTS.

    2008-08-02 17:04:54 補充:

    They cannot purchase thingS randomly until they have their jobs in the future. Meanwhile, they cannot fail IN any tests. If they flunked EXAMS, they have to figure out a better reason to EXPLAIN TO their parents.

    2008-08-02 17:05:17 補充:

    In my view, COLLEGE students have plenty of restrictions and limited RULES. BECAUSE OF these reason, I hope I can graduate FROM my school as quickly as possible. I AM NOT (or I DON'T WANT TO BE) busy just FOR passing examines. Moreover, I hope I can buy anything without asking my parents anymore.

    2008-08-02 17:05:29 補充:

    文章的架構很清楚

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