Jenny Hsu 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

高中英文作文 文法(急~10點)

這是我的暑假作業

我找不到人可以幫我看作文><((我沒有補英文

可以請大大們幫我看看哪裡文法有錯嗎?

真的很急....開學馬上就要交了.....

謝謝各位了.....

題目:My Summer Vacation

((第一段敘述印象深刻的活動內容

第二段敘述對明年升高三暑假的期許

我是寫"小人國"

Very long has not gone to the amusement park to play. Several days ago, I said with my mother I want to go to Lilliput. Then my mother let me to go to Lilliput with my friends on Sunday.We go there by sightseeing bus,and also forgot alight.In Lilliput,we saw mini conveyances,mini Palace Museum,and mini Center Memorial Hall. We walked to the amusement area,and play with Amusement facilities.There are a lot of Amusement facilities in the Lilliput.For example,Yunsiao speeding car,Bumper car, and Merry-go-round. Inside Lilliput meal is more expensive than others amusement park. I ate the food and drank have spend the quick NT500 in the amusement park.First time it does not have adult to take the sightseeing bus.

I hope next summer vacation,I can review all curricula,prepares the schoolwork diligently,and seeks own goal.

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謝謝mcbunny

想請問一下

ride當名詞並沒有"遊樂設施"的意思耶....

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呆呆的呆仔:

nearly我查字典

是幾乎/差不多的意思

好像沒有差一點的意思耶!!

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麻琳糬:

我不是沒有學過英文

只是這是我第一次用英文寫作文

很多都是查字典的^^"

謝謝你跟我小人國的英文阿

我在寫之前查半天都查不到呢!!>

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  • 1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    I haven't visited an amusement park for a long time. Several days ago, I told my mother I wanted to go to Lilliput and she allowed me to go there with friends on Sunday. We went there by sightseeing bus but forgot to get off. (?) In Lilliput, we saw many things, such as a mini conveyances, a mini National Palace Museum, and a mini C.K.S. Memorial Hall. We walked to the Funfair area and rode on many rides. There are a lot of rides you could ride on, such as the roller coasters, bumper cars, and merry-go-round. The food in Lilliput is more expensive than that in other amusement parks. I spent about 500 NTD on food and drinks in the amusement park. And the money went very quickly.

    It was the first time I took the sightseeing bus without any adults accompanying me. I hope during the next summer vacation, I can review all the things I've learned, study more diligently, and seek my own goal in the foreseeable future.

    2008-08-26 13:57:26 補充:

    rides 有遊樂場裡的遊樂項目的意四.

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  • 1 0 年前

    你說 你沒學過英文?

    那你算厲害喔!

    可以把自己的意思 都有表達出來

    雖然內文 文法、用詞還需要加強

    但....

    若你繼續努力專研英文,想必日後會是英文高手喔!

    我覺得 大家已經幫你差不多了

    我也不用多在說些甚麼

    只是~~~

    小人國的英文....為啥事...Lilliput?????

    我記得 他們的英文是

    Window On China

    小人國主題樂園

    Window On China Theme Park

    所以 你要修改一下喔!

    另外 呆呆說的有一個 mini conveyance, the mini Palace......

    這句....我認為 "the" 是不需要的。

    我是從小在國外長大....現在回到台灣工作

    你若是有甚麼英文的問題

    可以問我囉^^

    參考資料: 自己
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  • 1 0 年前

    Very long has not gone to the amusement park to play.

    老實說...這句到底是啥東西啊?

    如果是你很久沒去了

    →I haven't been/ gone to the amusement park for a long time.

    Several days ago, I said with my mother I want to go to Lilliput.

    say 是普通說話,tell 才是告訴的意思

    →I told my mother (that) I want/ desire to go to Lilliput.

    Then my mother let me to go to Lilliput with my friends on Sunday.

    1. let 為使役動詞,let O. VR,所以不加 to

    2. on Sunday 是沒錯,但較建議寫 last Sunday 或其他的較順暢

    →Then/ Therefore, my mother let me go to Lilliput with my friends on Sunday.

    We go there by sightseeing bus, and also forgot alight.

    1. forget 用法為 (1) + Ving 忘記做過某事 (2) + to VR 忘記去做某事

    2. also 建議換成 almost/ nearly(差一點) 比較好

    →We go there by sightseeing bus, and nearly forgot alighting/ getting off.

    In Lilliput,we saw mini conveyances,mini Palace Museum,and mini Center Memorial Hall.

    1. the 專有名詞較佳

    2. A, B and C 不用再加,

    →In Lilliput,we saw many mini conveyances, the mini Palace Museum and the mini Center Memorial Hall.

    We walked to the amusement area and play with Amusement facilities. There are a lot of Amusement facilities in the Lilliput. For example,Yunsiao speeding car, Bumper car and Merry-go-round. Inside Lilliput meal is more expensive than others amusement park.

    1. 用 inside 這個字來展現字量嗎@@,用 in 比較簡單啦^^"

    2. others 為名詞喔,other(其他的) 才對喔

    →In Lilliput, the meal is more expensive than other amusement park.

    = In Lilliput, the meal is more expensive than the others.

    I ate the food and drank have spend the quick NT500 in the amusement park.

    這句我不是很瞭解

    應該是花將近500在吃喝上吧

    我猜啦^^"

    →I spent about NT500 on food(s)/ diets/ meals in the amusement park.

    First time it does not have adult to take the sightseeing bus.

    你的意思是說

    第一次沒有大人陪伴搭車嗎?

    →This is my first time to take the sightseeing bus without adults.

    I hope next summer vacation,I can review all curricula,prepares the schoolwork diligently,and seeks own goal.

    1. 主格是 I,不需加 s

    2. 尋找目標 建議改成 達成目標 achieve/ accomplish one's goal

    →I hope I can review all curricula, prepare the schoolwork diligently and achieve my goals next summer vacation.

    終於看完了你的作文

    內文還算不錯啦

    繼續努力加油啊

    2008-08-24 21:59:05 補充:

    關於NT500 的話

    寫 500 NT dollars 比較好一點

    2008-08-25 21:31:42 補充:

    nearly 差不多

    沒錯啊 是這個意思

    "差一點"是翻譯上的通暢度

    意思是不變的

    參考資料: 自己
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