欣倫 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

幫忙改寫英文文章 (大贈十五點)

下面有一篇英文文章 ,可以用英文重新改寫一次嗎,只要意思相同用自己的話寫出來就好了,用法可以盡量正式點,因為是要交給老師看的,謝謝囉

The festivities reflect the region's burgeoning reputation for culture and the arts. The hub of the event remains Centenary Square, which has hosted major club DJs, newly signed bands, jazz dancing, gospel and classical performances and the Birmingham Royal Ballet in previous years.

Aside from the main events, visitors can see art brought to life in the Art Village and there's the chance to try your hand at a variety of activities, from salsa to DJing, in the Do It! workshop tents. Then there's the special mini ArtsFest for the under fives, food and drink events, information stalls and a whole range of roving performances.

The concept of ArtsFest was jointly developed by both organisations. Since 2005 ArtsFest has been solely produced by Birmingham City Council where it has continued to grow in size each year.

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  • 1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    Changes

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    The hub of the event remains Centenary Square, which has hosted major club DJs, newly signed bands, jazz dancing, gospel and classical performances and the Birmingham Royal Ballet in previous years.

    ---DJ's instead of DJs; jazz dancings instead of jazz dancing because others are plural; a comma(,) before the last and---

    The hub of the event remains Centenary Square, which has hosted major club DJ's, newly signed bands, jazz dancings, gospel and classical performances, and the Birmingham Royal Ballet in previous years.

    PS: a paragraph needs three sentences

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    Aside from the main events, visitors can see art brought to life in the Art Village and there's the chance to try your hand at a variety of activities, from salsa to DJing, in the Do It! workshop tents.

    ---can see arts or can see the arts---

    ---change to if you want: a variety of activities such as salsa and even DJing in the Do It! workshop tents!---

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    Try to write a little bit more convincing like

    this is the only....

    you can experience these activities YOURSELF!

    but you did a terrific job on writing!

    PS: all changes are optional, but it's just a little better on the grammar

    參考資料: me
  • Wen
    Lv 5
    1 0 年前

    老師要你用“自己的話”,不是別人的話吧?

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