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Zoo is a good place for everyone to see the animals around the world. Because every country around the world has more than one zoo, people don't have to go abroad to see the unique animals. Becides, zoo coule educate children what they couldn't learn at school. It is a positive and funny place. However, some people think those animals in the zoo are unhappy, because they couldn't live their home country and go everywhere. It is not follow nature law.

IN my opinion, I think zoo is positive for us. Although there are a lot of negative, we con improve it as possible as we can. Ithink every country should have a zoo, but it doesn't need morethan two zoos.

some people think those animals in the zoo are unhappy, because they couldn't live their home country and go everywhere. those animals in the zoo are unhappy, because they couldn't live their home country and go everywhere.

這句話的文法好像怪怪的

因為從 some people think 後面的子句 再加一個逗號 可以用because連接詞連起來嗎?

換句話說,如果少了some people think 這樣就可以變成一個完整的句子,可是因為多了它,已經從主要子句便成子句了。

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  • 1 0 年前
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    Zoo is a good place for everyone to see the animals around the world. Because every country around the world has more than one zoo, people don't have to go abroad to see the unique animals. Becides, zoo (can) educate children what they (can't) learn (in) school. It is a positive and (interesting) place. However, some people think those animals in the zoo are unhappy, because they (can't live in) their (country) and go everywhere. It is not follow nature law.

    IN my opinion, I think zoo is positive for us. Although there are a lot of negative, we can improve it as possible as we can. I (believe) every country (must) have a zoo, but it doesn't need more than two zoos.

    ※( )是我改的地方

    首先,could should would 這種助動詞過去式不可以隨便用

    它通常只用在假設語氣或命令祈使句

    例如:

    The teacher required that all the students should their homework.

    老師要求所有的學生都要做作業

    所以你文中所寫的could should 我都改掉了

    況且你所寫的文章都是現在式,但是助動詞卻突然變成過去式不是很怪嗎?

    既然講到should ,我就順便講最後一個括號的

    英文文法中不喜歡模稜兩可,要就要 不要就不要

    我想你所要表達是每個國家都要有一個動物園

    那就用確信肯定語氣強烈的 must

    同樣的前面的 I think......也是

    以 我確信 I believe會比我認為還要強調

    再來是funny 的地方

    funny多是形容人,而且帶點貶意是滑稽、像小丑般的

    所以要形容一個地方很好玩可以用interesting表示有趣

    另外,家鄉用country即可

    希望我講的你聽的懂

    不會的還可以在問我!

    參考資料: 自己
  • 1 0 年前

    "home country"

    改成"hometown"

    我覺得會比較好...

    home country ->本國

    hometown ->家鄉

  • 1 0 年前

    some people think those animals in the zoo didn't have freedom and, those animals feel

    unhappy.

    (這樣因該比較順暢吧!!)

    參考資料: 自己
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