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There are five competitors exporting wine to Japan which are France, Italy, US, Chile, and Spin. The Major wine suppliers are France, Italy and US. Especially, France retains its dominant position as Japan's supplier of alternative. Australia is the fourth largest wine exporter after France, Italy and US in 2007(Australian Trade Commission, 2008) .The main imported Australian wines in Japan are Yellow Tail and BRL Hardy. These two main Australian wines have been lasted in Japan for ages. Therefore, Penfolds has to be aware with these competitors as soon as enters to Japan’s wine market.

The competitors of Penfolds are not only France, Italy, US, Chile, and Spin and also the domestic wine industries which Penfolds needs to be concerned with. There are about 100 kilometers winery (62.5 miles) in west of Tokyo and Japan has around 23.000 of vineyards that produce 250.000 tonnes grapes per year ( Australia government, 2008 ). As result, Penfolds need to be aware with the domestic competitors.

However, the competitors for Penfolds are not only wine industries. There is huge consumption of beer and other alcohol beverages in Japan. Therefore, the strategies of Penfolds Thomas Hyland Shiraz 2003 have to be very impressive to Japanese.

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Penfolds would like to position their product as high quality and middle of price product. Because of the making wine techniques differences from Franch and Italy, Penfolds is able to produce find wine without long period, Thus, anyone is able to afford it.

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    There are five competitors exporting wine to Japan (, 此處須使不限定關係代名詞,故前須加逗點,否則which代表 Japan) which are France, Italy, US, Chile, and Spin(, and) the major wine suppliers are France, Italy and US, especially, France retains its dominant position as Japan's supplier of alternative. Australia is the fourth largest wine exporter after France, Italy and US in 2007(Australian Trade Commission, 2008) , the main imported Australian wines in Japan are Yellow Tail and BRL Hardy, these two main Australian wines have been (sold) in Japan for ages, therefore, Penfolds has to be aware (that) these competitors (will soon) enter(s去除) (to去除,enter是及物動詞,不需介詞) Japan’s wine market.

    The competitors of Penfolds are not only France, Italy, US, Chile, and Spin (but) also the domestic wine (manufacturers) which Penfolds needs to be concerned with, there are about 100 kilometers winery (area) (62.5 miles) in (the) west of Tokyo and Japan has around 23(,)000 (少了單位) of vineyards that produce 250(,)000 (tons) grapes per year ( Australia government, 2008 ), as (a) result, Penfolds need to be aware (of) the domestic competitors.

    However, the competitors for Penfolds are not only wine industries, there (are) huge consumption of beer and other alcohol beverages in Japan, (so), the strategies of Penfolds Thomas Hyland Shiraz 2003 have to be very impressive to Japanese.

    Penfolds would like to position their product(s) as high quality and middle of price (ones), because (of 去除,因後面已接子句) the (wine making) techniques (are different) from (those of ) Franch and Italy, (and that make) Penfolds is able to produce find wine without long period, Thus, anyone (can affords) it.

    2008-10-09 10:16:54 補充:

    There are five competitors exporting wine to Japan , which are France, Italy, US, Chile, and Spin, and the major wine suppliers are France, Italy and US, especially, France retains its dominant position as Japan's supplier of alternative, Australia is the fourth largest wine exporter after France,

    2008-10-09 10:17:39 補充:

    Italy and US in 2007(Australian Trade Commission, 2008) , the main imported Australian wines in Japan are Yellow Tail and BRL Hardy, these two main Australian wines have been sold in Japan for ages, therefore, Penfolds has to be aware that these competitors will soon enter Japan’s wine market.

    2008-10-09 10:18:29 補充:

    The competitors of Penfolds are not only France, Italy, US, Chile, and Spin but also the domestic wine manufacturers which Penfolds needs to be concerned with, there are about 100 kilometers winery area (62.5 miles) in the west of Tokyo

    2008-10-09 10:18:45 補充:

    and Japan has around 23,000 (tons ?)of vineyards that produce 250,000 tons grapes per year ( Australia government, 2008 ), as a result, Penfolds need to be aware of the domestic competitors.

    2008-10-09 10:19:04 補充:

    However, the competitors for Penfolds are not only wine industries, there are huge consumption of beer and other alcohol beverages in Japan, so, the strategies of Penfolds Thomas Hyland Shiraz 2003 have to be very impressive to Japanese.

    2008-10-09 10:19:21 補充:

    Penfolds would like to position their products as high quality and middle of price ones, because the wine making techniques are different from those of Franch and Italy, and that make Penfolds is able to produce find wine without long period, Thus, anyone can affords it.

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