1. They played together and constructed a village on lake side.
played together與constructed a village兩件事並非直接的因果且規模差距頗大, 建議加個even(甚至於), 表示程度的大幅提高.
→ They played together and even constructed a village on lake side.
2. He has not lonely and roam any more. (X)
lonely是形容詞, 前面是be動詞才對. 後半句roam的否定式要用助動詞do. 整句的時態不對, 應配合第1句用過去式.
→ He was not lonely and did not roam any more. (O)
3. He is happy and live with his new friends. (X)
時態也應配合改為過去式. is happy與live with his new friends兩語意並非對等, 建議改為不定詞to live當副詞片語修飾happy.
→ He was happy to live with his new friends. (O)
2008-10-08 22:14:48 補充：
They play together and even construct a village on lake side. He is not lonely and does not roam any more. He is happy to live with his new friends .
2008-10-08 22:21:50 補充：
on (the) lake side = at the lake side
注意前者加the語意著重side, 不加the是把lake side視為一字.