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As far as I am concerned , I think that the university student can part time jobs. As a matter of fact, though it's become normal for university students to part time jobs. Because may not only earn own like this school expense but also to be allowed before the graduation earns in the work experience. Each of the students make the most of his own time. So, I think work at the university during the first year to third-year university of the most appropriate. Students in fourth grade should be planning a way out after graduating from an important period. For example ,research institute or curriculum vitae of candidates full-time jobs. Instead of wasting time on part time jobs. Of course, to work though , not only to earn pocket money but also acquire the independence and responsibility. However , academic can not the affected by the part time jobs.

可以請英文達人幫我修改文法嗎?

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    As far as I am concerned , I think that the university student can (takes) part time jobs, as a matter of fact, though it's become (common situation) for university students to (get) part time jobs. Because may not only earn school (tuition and life) expense but also (get work experiences) before (they graduated from school.), each of (them) make the most of (their) own time, so, I think (taking a work) during the first year to third-year (when studying at university) (is very) appropriate(woke at the university 是指在大學校園內工作), (but, 後面對畢業後之作法有不同意見,此處應使轉折語) students in fourth grade should (plan, 應該做什麼,使用現在式,不適合用進形式,唸一次想一下它的意思,即可判斷對或錯) a way out (for the time) after graduat(ed, 畢業都用過去式)from (university, “an important period” 他人不知意思為何), for example , (being a full time student of) research institute or curriculum vitae of candidates instead of wasting time on part time jobs, (and 轉折並使前後句語氣連接) of course, (taking a work) , not only (earn) pocket money but also acquire the (sense of) independence and responsibility (not only …..but also 可直接加動詞、形容詞、名詞,可不必加to於動詞前), however , academic (learning) (should) not (be) affected by (the 非特別指定的工作,不必加the) part time jobs.

    2008-10-11 20:32:31 補充:

    As far as I am concerned , I think that the university student can takes part time jobs, as a matter of fact, though it's become common situation for university students to get part time jobs.

    2008-10-11 20:32:59 補充:

    Because may not only earn school tuition and life expense but also get work experiences before they graduated from school, each of them make the most of their own time, so,

    2008-10-11 20:33:11 補充:

    I think taking a work during the first year to third-year when studying at university is very appropriate, but students in fourth grade should plan, a way out for the time after graduated from university,

    2008-10-11 20:33:29 補充:

    for example , being a full time student of research institute or curriculum vitae of candidates instead of wasting time on part time jobs, and of course, taking a work , not only earn pocket money

    2008-10-11 20:33:40 補充:

    but also acquire the sense of independence and responsibility, however , academic learning should not be affected by part time jobs.

    2008-10-11 22:32:49 補充:

    修正

    As far as I am concerned , I think that the university student can takes part time jobs, as a matter of fact, (though) it's become common situation for university students to get part time jobs.

    上句之 though 應去除,因該字於此與全句語意不符,意思與全句相反,是一轉折語,後應接不同意思之語句才對。

    2008-10-12 14:00:54 補充:

    我現在了解你為何寫 though,使用though , 後面的敘述應有不同意見的內容,可是不同意見內容是研究所那部分,離太遠,其間又有很多關於打工的敘述,因此去除 though 比較合適。

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