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Orwell was not justified in shooting the elephant because his motivation was deviant.

TS1: Orwell should not use embarrassment by the crowd as the motivation to kill an elephant. He becomes irritated when he felt the pressure which came from the crowd. For example, Orwell didn’t really want to shot the elephant, but there are two thousand people that watching his each step. He did not want anyone look him down, especially in front of the crowd. George Orwell writes that “The crowd would laugh at me. And my whole life, every white man’s life in the East, was on long struggle not to be laughed at.” (216). He probably views killing the elephant as a wonderful chance that would change the crowd’s perspective on white man. This leads him to make the wrong decision.

TS3: The elephant is a sacrifice for fulfill the crowd’s expectation. In the moment, they found the elephant; it was peacefully eating its straws. It gives a chance to Orwell that think about how to deal with it. Although Orwell has the duty for keeping people away from the danger because that is his job, he cannot shoot an elephant when it looks so peaceful. He may says that he does not want to take the risk, however, he most likely to forget there is some other way can solve the problem besides shooting.

TS3: Killing is cruel regardless of its legality. George Orwell says that “And afterwards I was very glad that the coolie had been killed; it put me legally in the right and it gave me a sufficient pretext for shooting the elephant.” (218). Orwell probably had a conscience stirring all the time so he has to have a legally excuse for making him feels better. Even though an out of control elephant accidently killed a man and destroyed people’s property, it does not mean we have the right to take its life away. For example, most people are strongly refuse we have the death penalty, not only because it is cruel but also lives cannot be pay back.

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    因內容超過限制,請將括符去除,可得全文:

    Orwell was not justified in shooting the elephant because his (motive) was deviant.

    TS1: Orwell should not use (the pressure that came from) the crowd as the motivation to kill (the) elephant, He (became) irritated when he felt the (stress that crowd exerted on him), (in fact), Orwell didn’t really want to (shoot, to 後面應接原形動詞) the elephant, but there (were) two thousand people (who) watching (what measures he would adopt), (and) he did not want anyone (to) look him down, especially in front of (so many people), George Orwell writes that “The crowd would laugh at me (in) my whole life, (and) every white man’s life in the East (will ) (no) long (can) struggles (out of) (being ridiculed)” (216), (so), he probably view(ed) killing the elephant as a (good) chance (to) change the crowd’s (prejudice) on white (people), (and that led) him to make the wrong decision.

    TS2: The elephant (was taken as) a sacrifice for fulfill(ing) the crowd’s expectation, in (that) moment, they found the elephant (which) was peacefully eating (its去除) straws, (and this situation) (offered) a chance to Orwell (to) think about how to deal with it, although (because his job), Orwell (had) the duty for keeping people away from the danger, he (should not) shoot an elephant when it look(ed) so (peaceful,so 後須加形容詞), he may (said) that he (didn’t) want to take (that) risk, however, he (was) most likely to forget there (were) some other way(s) (could) solve the problem besides shooting.

    2008-10-13 16:39:50 補充:

    TS3: Killing is cruel regardless of its legality, George Orwell (said) that “And afterwards I was very glad that the coolie had been killed; (which) put me legally in the right and it gave me a sufficient pretext for shooting the elephant.”

    2008-10-13 16:40:43 補充:

    (218). Orwell probably had a conscience stirring all the time so he (had) to have a (reasonable) excuse for making (himself) feel(s去除,使役動詞後須用原形) better, even though an out of control elephant accidently killed a man and destroyed people's propert(ies),

    2008-10-13 16:40:54 補充:

    (but) it does not mean we have the right to take its life away, (just like) most people (strongly opposed) we (keep) the death penalty, (it is not only because of cruelty) but also (life) cannot be (paid) back when it's gone.

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