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請英文能力好的人幫我訂正這篇文章(非常急)

We need food. We eat because we want to live.

Diet habit and health are closely related. Some people think that chicken soup is good for health and some people believe that meatless diet can to prevent some diseases happening. In my opinion, we should to ingest more water, fruits and vegetables, because living in the busy modern society, most of the people often eat outside we buy our lunch or dinner in the fast-food restaurants, so that we are not to ingest enough fiber in our diet. However, we need a balanced diet in order to stay healthy.

Today, Taiwanese people are very fortunate. Because here has plentiful goods and materials and Taiwan is known for the famous food.

People in Taiwan can afford to eat in luxury restaurants, some people like to eat those unnecessary expensive foods, just like shark fins and swallow nest. They go there to eat such expensive things is not because they need the food, but to show off their riches.

On the contrary, many African people are dying today for lack of food, compared with them we are so lucky, therefore we should not waste our food. In addition, we should against eat animals of endangered species.

We don’t have to need the expensive food we will stay healthy as long as we have a balanced diet everyday.

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    We need food. We eat just because we want to live.

    Diet habit and health are closely related. Some people think that chicken soup is good for health and some people believe that meatless diet can prevent some diseases . In my opinions, we should ingest more water, fruits and vegetables, because of living in the busy modern society, most of the people often eat outside , and we buy our lunch or dinner in the fast-food restaurants. So that we don't ingest enough fibers in our diet. However, we need a balanced diet in order to stay healthy.

    Today, Taiwanese people are very fortunate. Because here has plentiful goods and materials and Taiwan is well-known for the famous food.

    People in Taiwan can afford to eat in luxury restaurants, some people like to eat those unnecessary expensive foods, just like shark fins and swallow nest. They go there to eat such expensive things not because they need it, just show off their riches.

    On the contrary, many African people are dying due to lack of food.Compared with them, we are so lucky. Therefore we should not waste our food. In addition, we should against eating animals of endangered species.

    We don't need the expensive food .We will stay healthy if we have a balanced diet everyday.

    我覺得你原來寫的就可以了

    所以我改的也不多

    希望對你有幫助

    參考資料: 自己
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  • 呆子
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    1 0 年前

    everyone has to eat for living.

    Diet is a good habit for your health . it is good for you to eat chicken soup and be a vegetarian to decrease diseases . In my opinion, we should drink more water and eat more fruits and vegetables.because most people living in the modern society often eat outside like fast-food restaurants, so that they are not to eat enough fiber for digesting. However, we need a balance diet in order to keep healthy.

    Today, people in Taiwan are very fortunate,Because there are plentyof famous food for eating . they can afford to eat in a luxury restaurant even though some foods are unnecessary like shark fins and swallow nest. They eat such expensive just for showing off their richness.

    many Africans are dying of food shortage. we are so lucky , therefore, we should not waste our food. In addition, we should not eat preserved animals.

    1.各種語言有其慣性用法,像英文常用被動語態,而我們就缺乏,所以思維方式需有所不同。

    2.語言能簡易表達即可,不需堆疊一些贅字,而易生語意混淆

    3.有些單字中文是一樣,但英文就不同,如die ,kill 都是死,但意外死亡就需用kill

    4.第四段落轉折語用太多,反而修辭變差了

    5.建議增加閱讀初淺英文文章

    6.以上不成熟意見,僅供參考,希望你未來能更精進*****

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