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My friend Helen is a strange person. For example, there was a raining day, and no one was home in her family, so she had to prepare her own lunch. She was very lazy. She can’t cook, but she also didn’t want to go out to buy lunch because she had to change her cloth. When Helen ready to go out it was already 2:00pm, and she couldn’t find her own shorts, so she wore her older brother’s shorts. There was a boy saw her wore a boy’s shorts, and laughed at her. He also told his friend about it and took a picture of her. Another thing, she doesn’t like to take bath, but she always says she is a clean person because she washes her face, hands, and feet every day when she gets home. Sometimes she even wears the same cloth as yesterday to the school. Even she is a strange person, but sometimes she is funny, so I like to be friend with her.

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  • 1 0 年前
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    My friend, Helen, is a strange person, for example, one raining day, no one stayed at home, so she had to prepare lunches for herself , but she was very lazy and she couldn’t cook, she also didn’t like to go out to buy lunch because she had to change her clothes. When Helen was ready to go out , it was 2:00pm already, and because she couldn’t find her own shorts, she wore her older brother’s, a boy saw her wore boy’s shorts, laughing at her, he also told his friend about that and took a picture of her, Another thing, she doesn’t like to take a bath, but she always says she is clean because she washes her face, hands, and feet every day after she gets home, sometimes she even wears the clothes of yesterday to school, even though she is a strange person, but sometimes she is funny, so I like to make friend with her.

    2008-11-18 20:00:37 補充:

    文章內部分敘述建議修正:

    1.在一個下雨天 one raining day ,不需要there was,它大多是用於有事物存在時使用,如there are three persons in this house.

    2.no one was home in her family是不順且蘩複的敘述法(重複home及family),因文章本就是在談Helen的事,直接以no one stayed at home,讀者就可了解了。

    2008-11-18 20:01:15 補充:

    3.she also didn't want to go out 改she also didn’t like to go out 有時表達心裡想要做的事使用 like 比want合適溫和,want 感覺比較強烈。Don’t like to 不想…….,不喜歡…………….,don’t want to 不要………………… ,意境上有點差異。

    4.be ready to 已準備好做某事,ready 是形容詞,前必須有be 動詞。

    2008-11-18 20:01:46 補充:

    5.she couldn’t find her own shorts, she wore her older brother’s ,前已談到短褲,此處可省略。

    6.told his friend about that,告訴朋友那件事,那件事使用that 比較合適,it 多表 “它” ,”一件物品”

    7.沐浴 take a bath,之間須加 a。

    2008-11-18 20:02:13 補充:

    8.she always says she is clean,原句she always says she is a clean person 一個乾淨的人,是過多的敘述,通常的對話都說”我是乾淨的”,而不會說”我是乾淨的人”。

    9.washes her face, hands, and feet every day when she gets home, get home是到達家裡的意思,當她到達家裡時,會洗臉………………. ,時間上有點不正確,在到家的同時並不會洗什麼,應是到家”之後” after. 或在家時 when she stay at home

    2008-11-18 20:02:40 補充:

    10.wears the same clothes as yesterday 穿和昨日一樣的衣服,文章語意應是她穿昨日的衣服,wears the clothes of yesterday.

    11.even though she is a strange person, even 是甚至的意思,但文意應是”即使”

    even though。

  • 1 0 年前

    My friend Helen is a weird girl. For instance, it was a raining day, and no one was home in her family. She had to prepare her own lunch. However, she was very lazy. She wanted neither to cook, nor to buy lunch because she had to change her cloth. When Helen was finally ready to go out, it was already 2:00pm. She couldn't find her own shorts, so she put on her older brother's shorts. A boy laughed at her wearing boy's shorts and told his friend about it then took a picture of her.

    In addition, she doesn't like to take bath. She always claims that she is very clean because she washes her face, hands, and feet every day when she gets home. Sometimes she even wears the same cloth as yesterday to the school. Eventhough she is a strange person, sometimes she is funny, too. Therefore, I like to be her friend.

    寫的還不錯壓. 如果可以注意一下時態的

    參考資料: myself
  • 1 0 年前

    My friend Helen is a strange person. For example, on a rainy day, when she was alone in her house, and had to prepare her own lunch. She couldn't cook, and she didn’t want to go out to buy lunch because she didn't want to change her cloth. When Helen was ready to go out it was already 2:00pm, and she couldn’t find her own shorts, so she wore her older brother’s shorts. There was a boy saw her wearing a boy’s shorts, and laughed at her. He also told his friend about it and took a picture of her. Another example was that, she didn’t like to take a bath, but she always said she was a clean person because she washes her face, hands, and feet every day when she gets home. Sometimes she even wore the same cloth as yesterday to the school. Even she is a strange person, but sometimes she is funny, so I like to be friend with her.

    再寫之前把重點寫清楚

    針對要寫的題目先列大綱文章會比較有層次

    像你這篇應該是要討論你的朋友為什ㄇ很奇怪

    你應該將兩個層次分出來 第一是因為他很懶

    第二是因為他很髒

    再做結論

    參考資料: me
  • Yes Go
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    1 0 年前

    My friend, Helen, is a strange person. For example, it was a rainy day and no one was at home in her family, so she had to prepare her own lunch. She can't cook, so she had to buy her lunch by herself. But she was too lazy to go out because she had to change her clothes. When Helen was ready to go out, it was already 2:00pm. Meanwhile, she couldn't find her own shorts, so she wore her older brother's shorts. There was a boy saw her wore boy's shorts, and laughed at her. The boy also told his friend about it and took a picture of her. Besides, she doesn't like to take a bath, but she always says she is a clean person because she washes her face, hands, and feet every day when she gets home. Sometimes she even wears the same clothes as yesterday to school. Even she is a strange person, but sometimes she is funny, so I like to be friend with her.

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  • 1 0 年前

    我的朋友海倫是個奇怪的人。例如,有一天下雨,她的家裡沒有人,所以她準備自己的午餐。她非常懶惰。她不會做菜,但她也不想出去買午餐,因為她不得不改變她的衣服。當海倫準備出門已經是下午2:00 ,她找不到自己的短褲,所以她穿著哥哥的短褲。有一個男孩看到她穿了男孩的短褲,並嘲笑她。他還告訴他的朋友,並諷刺了她。另一件事,她並不喜歡沐浴,但她總是說她是一個乾淨的人,因為每天當她一回到家便洗臉,手,腳。有時,她甚至穿著同樣的衣服昨天到學校。即使她是一個奇怪的人,但有時她是有趣的,所以我想與她好朋友。

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