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chia wen 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

誰能為我的演講稿修改?

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1.文法正確 2.內容平易 3. 生動詼諧

I belonged to a special class, which accompany me through the past three years. There’s a person who led us to have wonderful school times and encouraged us to take part in various kinds of activities. Although he’s not as handsome as our PE teacher, he really changed our class. Guess who he is, our homeroom teacher.

In fact, I was little bit hate him at first. I still remember that one time he helped me to practice before a speech competition, he asked me to read for him. At the moment I got on the stage, he said that I walk like a naughty leopard, and asked me to repeat the same action again and again. Moreover, in the middle of my speech, he started to have a doze, and couldn’t stop from shaking his head. I was very angry at that time.

With the time goes by, I found that he really paid lots of efforts for our class. My class made improvements day by day under his teaching. He’s always full of pep, and busy dealing with our matters. However, he never complains. Every time we had good grades, he always praised us and shared the honor with us. And, of course, when we lost the contest, he would encourage us. But, actually, most of time he was in bad mood. No matter how, he enjoys being our teacher.

He is enthusiastic in teaching; you can see the handwriting on the blackboard in the picture. He had tried every method to improve our grades, and set high standard with us. Besides studies, he wanted us to skilled in every aspect. For instance, we even had a lot of practice about cooking before the camping trip. Moreover, he put emphasizes on our physical training. And that’s why we always got first prices in ball games. It made us love to join competitions, and have remarkable achievements.

I think that it’s just because his encouragement can we have the bravery to face every challenges. It made us have not only good time but also unforgettable memories. Though I have graduated now, I will appreciate him forever.

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能不能麻煩您告訴我如何將其唸的更生動的撇步?!

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    I belonged to a special class which led me through the past three years. There’s a person who gave us a wonderful times in school, and encouraged us to take roles in various kinds of activities. Although he’s not as handsome as our PE teacher, he really made some differences to our class. Guess who he is, our homeroom teacher.

    In fact, I did not like him at the beginning. I still remember that once he helped me to practice my speech before a competition. He asked me to read it to him. After I got up the stage, he said that I walk like a naughty leopard, and dictated me to repeat the same action over and over again. Moreover, in the middle of my speech, he started to doze off, and couldn’t stop from shaking his head. I was very angry at that time.

    After the time went by, I found out that he really paid a lot of efforts on our class. The whole class made greater improvements each day under his edification. He was always paying attention to deal with our matters. However, he never complained. Every time we got good grades, he always praised us and shared the joy with us. And, of course, whenever we lost any contest, he would cheer us up. But, actually, he was in bad mood most of the time. No matter how, he enjoyed being our teacher.

    He was like an aficionado when he taught us; you would realize it if you had seen his handwriting on the board. He used methods to improve our grades, and set high criteria. Besides learing, he wanted us to succeed from every aspect. For instance, we even had a lot of practices about cooking before we went camping. Moreover, he put emphasis on our physical activities. And that’s why we were always the champion in any sport games. It made us in favor of joining the competitions and have remarkable achievements.

    I think it’s because of his encouragement which made us unflinching to face any challenge. It created good times and unforgettable memories. Though I am graduated now, I still appreciate him for what he has done.

    2008-12-03 07:04:21 補充:

    暫時就這樣了

    應該有符合您的需求

    有哪些地方不滿意可以跟我說

    我會盡量回答您

    2008-12-04 06:20:24 補充:

    生動... 這不在我的能力範圍之內 因為每當我要上台講話時 腦袋就會一片空白

    所以要我講的生動是不可能的 自然也沒有方法可以敎你講的更生動

    但是 既然沒辦法講得像歐巴馬一樣 我就只好把演講稿念好幾遍 念到最後

    就可以機械式的唸出來 這樣至少不會結結巴巴的

    希望有幫到你

    參考資料: 自己
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