阿嵐 發問時間: 教育與參考考試 · 1 0 年前

英文自傳誰幫我!!

我們最近要交英文自傳但是我擠破了頭老師說才50分

My name is Eva. I am graduate from Danjiang Senior High School of Nursing & Home Economics and major in English. There are five people in my family. I am the second children in my family. My father works in a worker. And my mother is a housewife.

I was join the something painting、singing、racing、dancing contest. But I just got second place on my painting contest. I learned to community spirit in that contest. I want to study in Department of Tourism Management. Because I like travel around. I wish I could make everybody happy and can feel my diligent. So I’ll do more effort in having exam.

I want to be tour guide in the future. I can go aboard with my family and friends or many people. The happier they are, the more success I will. And they will say this is a travel experience very good. I feel satisfy. This is the life which I want.

我很喜歡旅遊

但是我真的已經想不出來可以再打什麼

所以請幫我多加一點!

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  • pearl
    Lv 7
    1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    因你許多文法明顯錯誤,

    以下是我稍微幫你看的一些(藍色是更正後的文法

    和語意;紅色是我不清楚你要表達什麼意思-未更正):

    My name is Eva. I graduated from Danjiang Senior High

    School of Nursing & Home Economics and majored in

    English. There are five people in my family. I am the second

    child in my family.

    * 或可用 I rank second among children in my family.

    My father works in a factory(我不了解你worker在這裡是

    什意思). And my mother is a housewife.

    I joined some painting、singing、racing and dancing

    contests. And I won the second place at the painting contest.

    I learned to community spirit in that contest. I want to studyTourism Management because I like to travel around

    the world. I wish I could make everybody happy and can

    feel my diligent. So I’ll make more effort to pass exams.

    I want to be tour guide in the future because I can go aboard

    with my family 、 friends and many people. The happier they

    feel, the more success I will get. And they will say this is

    a travel experience very good. I'll feel satisfied. That's the

    life I expect.

    希望對你有幫助喔!

    參考資料: 請參見我說明檔的網站
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