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Birth Rates in China and the USA

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The graph provided revealed the birth rates in China and the US from 1920 to 2000. There was a evident that both of countries had fallen its birth rates during this perid of time.

China birth rates rose from around 10 percent to 15 percent in 1935. Followed by a sharp drop to mere 5 percent in 1940 and 1945. However, it increased dramatically in 1945 then drop to around 9 percent in 1955. Afterward it remained a steady drop from 1955 to 2000 in only about 4 percent. Likewise, the birth rate of the US was nearly as many as China birth rate from 1920 to 1930. However, there was a significant difference, while the US by 12 percent and China by 5 percent respectively.

It was interesting to note that, depite of its flunctuation from 1920 to 1950 in both of countries, the birth rate of the US was always higher more than China birth rate around 2 times after 1955.

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  • RY
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    1 0 年前
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    Birth Rates in China and the USA

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    The graph provided herwith the revealed birth rates in China and the US from 1920 to 2000. There was a evident that both of the countries had fallen its birth rates during this perid of time.

    China birth rates rose from 10 percent to 15 percent around in 1935. Followed by a sharp drop to merely 5 percent in 1940 and 1945. However, it increased dramatically in 1945 and then dropped to 9 percent around in 1955. Afterward it remained a steady drop from 1955 to 2000 in only 4 percent arround. Likewise, the birth rate of the US was nearly as many as China's from 1920 to 1930. However, there was a significant difference, while the US dropped by 12 percent and China dropped by merely 5 percent respectively.

    It was interesting and to be noted that, depite of its flunctuation from 1920 to 1950 in both of the countries, the birth rate of the US was always around 2 times more higher than China's after 1955.

    (I did it by my full strength of English comprehension.)

  • Mike
    Lv 5
    1 0 年前

    The graph provided revealed the birth rates in <both> China and the US from 1920 to 2000. There was <evidence that the birth rates in both countries had fallen> during this perid of time.

    <China's> birth <rate> rose from around 10 percent to 15 percent in 1935<, followed> by a sharp drop to mere 5 percent in 1940 and 1945. However, it increased <again> dramatically in 1945 <, and> then <dropped back> to around 9 percent in 1955. Afterward <there was> a steady drop from 1955 to 2000 <to> only about 4 percent. <The birth rate in the US was comparable to that of China> from 1920 to 1930. (( However, there was a significant difference, while the US by 12 percent and China by 5 percent respectively.)) <-- this makes no sense!

    It <is> interesting to note that, <despite> flunctuations from 1920 to 1950 in both countries, the birth rate of the US <has always been more than twice as high as that of China> after 1955.

  • 呆子
    Lv 7
    1 0 年前

    Birth Rate between China and USA

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    The graph shows the birth rate between China and US from 1920 through 2000. There was an evidence that both the birth rate of those countries had declined during this period of time.

    China birth rates rose from around 10 percent to 15 percent in 1935. then it dropped (to) mere 5 percent between 1940 and 1945. However, it dramatically increased in 1945 and dropped (to )around 9 percent in 1955. After all,it steadily declined from 1955 through 2000 by about 4 percent. even though the birth rates of the US was nearly as the same as China from 1920 to 1930, there was a significant difference, (while the US by 12 percent and China by 5 percent respectively.)

    It was outstanding that, depite its fluctuation from 1920 to 1950 for both countries,the birth rate of the US was always higher than China around 2 times since 1955.*****

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