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請各位大大幫我看看英文文法有沒有問題

如果有問題可以幫我修改一下

One day , Marian runs across Ted who is her junior high school classmate at a bus stop. They both want to pray to God for help. So they go to a very popular church in Paris. Marian dreams to be a famous detective. And Ted dreams to be a famous gunman. So God gives them a trial. If you can find a treasure box in Miami and open it , your dreams will be come true, God says. But they don’t have any clues. Ted suggests going to a beach. And then, they find a message in a bottle. It says that the treasure box’s key is in a snake’s belly, and you need to vanquish it. Finally, they find the snake and vanquish it. At the moment, they find the treasure box is next to the snake. How lucky it is! At the end, they open the treasure box. Both of their dreams come true.

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  • 1 0 年前
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    One day, Marian runs across Ted whose junior high school classmate at a bus stop. They both want to pray God’s help. So, they go to the most popular church in Paris. Marian dreams of being a famous detective and Ted dreams of being a well-known gunman. They tell god what their dreams are. However, God gives them a trial. “If they can find a treasure box in Miami and open it, your dreams will come true.” God said. Ted and Marian have no ideas. So, Ted suggests going to a beach. Suddenly, they find a bottle which is put into a paper of messages. It says that the treasure box’s key is in a snake’s belly, and you need to vanquish it. Ted and Marian start to find the snake. Fortunately, they find the snake and vanquish it, and the treasure box is also next to the snake. Then, they open the treasure box. Finally, both of their dreams come true.

    嗯~不知道這樣我做的這些修改可不可以~ 

    如果有小錯誤  先說不好意思ㄛ

    這篇文章 我有點自主的改了很多~ 

    不只修改了一些文法上的錯誤…sorry >.<

    寫文章的時候 盡量不要反覆用同樣的動詞或名詞~ 這樣可以讓你的文章看起來比較生動~ 不會死板板的! 像是famous 同樣是”出名的”英文上有不少單字 你可以用其他代替~

    1.dream of + V-ing 不是用to 喔~

    2.連接詞有很多 像however然而、Then然後

    所以也盡量不要重複用同樣的連接詞

    3.Finally 是最後的意思 所以寫文章

    盡量用在你想做結尾的地方~

    參考資料: 自己
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  • 1 0 年前

    So 不能當作句子的開頭 And 不能當作句子的開頭 And then 不能當作句子的開頭, 我們常會犯這樣的錯誤是因為用中文來想英文

    Marian runs across Ted who is her junior high school classmate at a

    bus stop one day. They both want to pray for God's help, so they go

    to a very popular church in Paris. Marian dreams to be a famous

    detective and Ted dreams to be a famous gunman. Thus, God gives

    them a trial. "If you can find a treasure box in Miami and open it,

    your dreams will come true," God says. However, they don't have

    any clues about where the box is. Ted suggests to go to a beach and

    they find a bottle with a message in it. It says the key of the treasure

    box is inside of a snake's belly, you need to vanquish the snake to

    get it. Finally, they find the snake and kill it. At the same time, they

    find the treasure box lays right next to the snake. As lucky as they

    are, they open the treasure box and their dreams come true.

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