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Improve this paragraph, which contains too many compund sentences.

Change compound sentances into complex sentances, using the following words: because, although, when, after, as soon as, since(每個單字只能用一次)

Russian women started to gain equality earlier than women in the United States. In the former Soviet Union, men and women had access to equal education and job opportunities, and that reflected the Soviet philosophy. The 1937 Soviet constitution declared that women and men had equal rights and responsibilities, and women joined the workforce. Also, millions of Russian men were away in the military during World War II, so Russian women filled their places at work. Soviet women worked full time at their job, but they also had the primary responsibility for taking care of the family. They finished their work, and they had to shop, cook the evening meal, and perhaps wash, iron, or mend the family’s clothes. U.S. women started to demonstrate that they could do the work of men during World War II.

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    Russian women started to gain equality earlier than women in the United States. [Since] the former Soviet Union, men and women had access to equal education and job opportunities, and that reflected the Soviet philosophy. [When] the 1937 Soviet constitution declared that women and men had equal rights and responsibilities, women [as soon as] joined the workforce. Also, [because] millions of Russian men were away in the military during World War II, Russian women filled their places at work. [Although] Soviet women worked full time at their job, they also had the primary responsibility for taking care of the family. [After} they finished their work, they had to shop, cook the evening meal, and perhaps wash, iron, or mend the family's clothes. U.S. women started to demonstrate that they could do the work of men during World War II.

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