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Personal Profile

*A dependable and responsible person who will always try its best

to achieve the goal.

*Having a modest heart to study the new things, and willing to

listen to other people's suggestions.

*Organized and able to finish works on time.

*Being optimistic and having a positive attitude towards life.

Education

***** University, Finance

Qualifications

*TOEIC:840

*The Trust Specialist

*The Securities Specialist

*For taking 「 Investment Trust and Consulting Regulations

(including Professional Ethics Rules) 」

*The Futures Specialist

*The Life Insurance Specialist

Key Experience

2008 summer

Interning at Land Bank

During this internship, I worked in different departments every week,

and realized different kinds of works in the bank.

Besides, the most praise I got from my manager was my

responsibility and positive attitude.

2006-2007

Member of the service club

We held summer and winter camps for children. Every year we went

to different schools in different counties for 11 days camp.

By joining this club, I learned not only the importance of cooperation with partners but also the ability of solving all kinds of problems that we faced.

2006

Member of Finance Departmental Student Association

As a member, I joined every activity and learned how to be a

good leader or follower in different situations.

2005-2008

Part time jobs included working in cram school and dessert shop.

As each job has its own difficulties, I can learn and try different

things by working part time jobs.

I always be serious and do my best in every job, which is also

my personal quality and advantage.

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  • 1 0 年前
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    Can you email me this ? I have lots to say and correct, but I am in a hurry on the way out, will do this later. **Important: don't use IT to indicate yourself.

    2009-03-19 03:49:53 補充:

    1) 先按年代近遠排列經歷資歷. + 略述工作內容, 不是只籠統說學到抽象的 Skill or ability, 2)以Qualifications輔助 3)最後加上自述 If you like, 因為這段是個人觀感, 是否如此還是由Interview者決定, 若他不認同, 只會變成反效果. 4) 學歷部分加強重列2-3項 , 5) Qualifications修正我幫不上忙, 除非中文及簡述一下才明白.

    Resume

    Key Experience

    2008 summer- Present

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    2008 summer (? Month-? Month)

    Interning at Land Bank of Taiwan

    I worked in different departments EACH week, and learn the professional terms using in the bank.

    The supervisor described me as a responsible person with positive attitude.

    2006-2007

    Member of the service club (正式名稱?)

    Each year The Club has an eleven-day camp in summer or/and winter for children to go to different schools and counties.( + 略述工作內容)

    By joining this club and accompanying children out of country, I now have the skill of how to cooperate with partners smoothly and the great ability of solving unexpected problems.

    2006

    Member of Finance Departmental Student Association (of Taiwan ?)

    By participating in all activities.( + 略述工作內容), I sharp my leader skill and sometimes play as a follower if the situation required.

    2005-2008

    Part time in cram school and dessert shop.

    + 略述工作內容, 例如 Phone answering, take phone order, gift packing, take and obey supervisor instruction, customer services, customer relationship.

    Education

    Year 2004-2005 Continue education in Finance Department, XXX University in US (進修於)

    Year 2004 Graduation from Finance Department, XXX University in Taiwan

    Qualifications

    ?*TOEIC:840

    ?*The Trust Specialist

    ?*The Securities Specialist

    ?*For taking 「 Investment Trust and Consulting Regulations

    (including Professional Ethics Rules) 」

    ?*The Futures Specialist

    ?*The Life Insurance Specialist

    How I describe myself:

    * I am a reliable and responsible person who will always do my best

    to achieve the goal.

    *I like to learn new things and learn it fast; I am a good listener for suggestion and have an open mind to take advice.

    * I am very organized and always finish works on time.

    * I am optimistic with a positive attitude for WORK.

    參考資料: 20 yrs US......10點派坦
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