TAINA 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

請幫我修改我的英文自傳!!

這是參加一個研習所要交給學校的自傳

本來打算請系上的老師修正

但被嫌一直 I.. I... I..的,要我再參考他人的修改

但好像已經窮途末路了

希望有人可以幫我把文字變得融洽 通暢且自然一點

謝謝

It is my pleasure to have this opportunity to introduce myself.

My name is Li . I grew up in the countryside of Hualien, this

background has the very tremendous influence to my life.

I become a responsible and independent person who always take

care of myself well. Both of my parents do not have to worry about

me because I can deal with affairs going around me. I’m 20 years

old now. The university life soon enters into the last year. I would

like to hold any chance to do anything what I want to do and what

I can do.

Many a time I saw news in Sichuan earthquake on TV and

newspaper. I am sorry, but my sympathy helps nothing.

It was a big letdown. Now I have the opportunity to go to Sichuan

to Learn about the disaster courses. I am desirous to vibration the

world outside the hospital. That would be a very shocking

experience in there. In this Disaster courses, I hope to

learn not only in Skills station, but also in problem based learning.

This summer program invited a lot of students from different school.

Excepting We can look forward to a different way of thinking with

this opportunity. By the way, I have lots my interest in Psychological

response and Dealing with emotions courses.

In a word, I believe that would be a great travel.

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針對不清那一句我想表達的是在台灣與大陸所接受的教育制度是不同的,他們很著重在批判性思考,所以思考路徑應該與我們有很大的差異,這種差異性期待可以讓我自己得到激勵與啟發。

另外在第二段的I felt sorry那裡,有人跟我說西方人比較不會直接說出感受,會比較像說看到災區的人們所受到的苦難讓我感到很難過之類的,那要怎麼改比較順暢呢?

謝謝你 :D

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  • 1 0 年前
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    It is my pleasure to have this opportunity to introduce myself.

    My name is Li, I grew up at the countryside of Hualien, this

    background has a tremendous influence to my life.

    I am a responsible and independent person, I always take

    care of myself well, so my parents do not have to worry about

    me, because I can deal with any affair comes to me by myself, I’m 20 years

    old now, and the time studying in the university will soon enters into the last year, I would like to take any chance to do anything that I want to do and what

    I can do.

    Every time when I saw the news about Sichuan earthquake on TV and

    newspaper, I felt sorry, but I can help nothing, it was a big letdown for me, but now I have an opportunity to go to Sichuan to join courses on the disaster, I am desirous of experiencing the vibration of the world outside the hospital, which I believe will be a very shocking experience in there.

    In these Disaster courses, I hope not only learn in Skills Station, but also from problem based learning, this summer program invited a lot of students from different schools, excepting we can look all the event with different thinking during those courses,(此句之原文意思不清楚,可能也有文字用法錯誤問題,故無法表達真正的意思,我儘量推想出本意並予修改,如非本意,請將中文貼出,以利重譯)

    and I have many interests in Psychology, especially, the response and dealing with emotions courses.

    In a word, I believe that would be a great trip.

    全文修正如有非本意之處,請將中文貼出。

    2009-06-04 09:07:40 補充:

    我未聽說有西方人比較不說內心感受這回事,比較內向不說內心想法的應是東方人。

    "I am sorry" 這句話多用於對他 "說抱歉" 的時候,用於文章並不合適。

    2009-06-04 09:27:37 補充:

    修正內容如下:

    2009-06-04 09:28:10 補充:

    I except we can learn more from the different thinking and method of teaching between mainland China and Taiwan during those courses, and I have many interests in Psychology, especially, the response and dealing with emotions courses, in a word, I believe that would be a great trip.

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