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簡短的英文作文~麻煩大家幫忙評分改正一下

題目是 Leon 的爸爸正叫她起床,因為今天全家要去公園玩

她們在公園野餐,還有放風箏

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This morning Leon's father call Leon get up,because they will go to the

park today, they are picnic in the park, and they enjoys delicious

food,Leon plays kite with his family in the afternoon,Leon is very happy,

they really have a good day.

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請問初級英檢寫作文一定要五十字嗎

少一點會被扣很多分嗎?

拜託大大幫我改改看喔

順便給個分數吧

已更新項目:

標點符號是說都要用句號嗎

在英文裡面不用逗號的嗎??

2 個已更新項目:

可是題目有寫

現在是早上7點半

爸爸正叫Leon起床

因為全家今天要去公園玩

這樣應該是用未來是吧?

可能是我ㄧ開始沒打清楚

sorry

請問大大如果是這樣的話勒

那就是用未來是嗎?

3 個解答

評分
  • 1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    段落寫作(50%);請根據提示,寫一篇約50字的文章描寫圖片的情節。本部分採整體式評分(0~5級分),再轉換成百分制。評分要點包括重點表達的完整性、文法、用字、拼字、字母大小寫、標點符號等。

    寫50字左右就好了!你寫的大概46字,應該是可以啦!如果有多時間的話,寫到60字也可呀!

    你說:題目有寫現在是早上7點半,所以用現在式就可以了^^

    我改了一下給您參考看看!

    Leon's father wakes him up at seven thirty this morning for they are going to have a picnic in the park. They enjoy the delicious food which is prepared by mom, and then they go flying the kite all the afternoon. Leon is very happy, and he really has a good time there.

    中文意思:雷恩的爸爸一早七點半就叫他起床了,因為他們要去公園野餐。他們很享受媽媽準備的美食。之後,他們放了一整個下午的風箏。雷恩非常地高興,而且在那裡玩得很愉快。

    Hope Helps!!

    2009-08-27 16:43:51 補充:

    英文會有逗號呀!大致上有 , . ; : ' - " " ? ...

  • chen
    Lv 7
    1 0 年前

    This morning Leon's father call Leon get up,because they will go to

    the park today, they are picnic in the park,

    and they enjoys delicious food,

    Adjusting:...

    It's sunday today in the morning, the sun rose early.

    Leon's father wanted to prepare something to do and

    he called Leon must be got up soon that they hoped all of

    them to the park and enjoyed tasteing the delicious foods.

    Leon plays kite with his familiy in the afternoon,Leon is very happy,

    they really have a good day.

    Adjusting;...

    Leon was so happy and played a kite with his families in all

    afternoon long .

    Both of them were realy a good day.

    Then they went back the way home.........

    2009-08-20 10:29:18 補充:

    Adding......

    they hoped all of them to the park.....

    they hoped all of them to the park for their picnic

    2009-08-20 10:36:35 補充:

    Adding....

    they hoped all of them to the park.....

    they hoped all of them to the park for their picnic.

    2009-08-20 13:52:10 補充:

    Adding:....

    That they hoped all of them to the park......

    that they hoped all of them to the park for their picnic....

  • 1 0 年前

    Leon's father woke up Leon this morning because the family were going to go to the park today. They had a picnic in the park and they enjoed the delicious food. Leon enjoyed flying the kite in the afternoon and he was really happy. They all had a great time and enjoyed the time together.

    第一﹐要注意你的標點符號。第二﹐你在描述的是一件已經發生過得事﹐所以要用過去式﹐不是現在式或未來式。 第三﹐初級是很簡單的級數﹐所以50字算少的﹐我想你應該儘量寫到50個字以上。

    參考資料: myself/English teacher
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