Justice 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

(英文)請給小弟寫的作文一些建議^^

這篇作文是小弟練習寫的,

文法或表達上有什麼不妥的話,

懇請熱心的大大們能給些建議,

感激不盡^^

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My mother country is a typical and beautiful land all over the world. It is placed in the Asia, one of glamorous island countries on the Pacific, called Taiwan.

Taiwan is known for its delicacies and per year many tourists would be here to taste local food. Every time, after everyone ate Taiwanese fine eatable and backed their country, they must be deeply dying for tasting it again. In fact, this is just one of Taiwanese features. In spite of being a small island nation, it is full of beautiful, grand scenery, such as Mt. Morrison, Taroko National Park, and Sun Moon Lake etc. Especially, Taroko is quite attractive to people not only in Taiwan but the world.

There are a lot of mountains dangerous and glorious in Taroko. When you go into there, would feel strongly that you are very little and the sight of the huge gorge and cave is much more exciting for everyone. However, although Taiwan is so good, it still faces troubles now. On September15, 2008, the bubble economy of the world also makes Taiwan suffer serious unemployment, which causes hundreds of thousands of people’s lack of job. Many of the people are blue under the circumstances everyday.

Even so, Taiwan is a young country compared to any other nation, but I steadily believe those who live in this will do everything that they can do to make it revive and become better, because this is our favorite mother country.

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    My mother country is a typical and beautiful island. It is placed in the South East Asia next to mainland China, and which is known to be one of the most glamorous island countries in the Pacific Ocean; we call it Taiwan.

    「all over the world」是「在世界每個角落」之解;「Asia」很大,最好講明白一點。

    Taiwan is known for its delicacies and every year thousands of tourists would come here to taste local food. Every time, after everyone has tried the Taiwanese fine cusines and went back to their countries, they must have been dying to taste those food again.

    用「many」太籠統了。

    In fact, this is just one of many Taiwanese features. In spite of being a small island nation, it is full of beautiful and grand sceneries, such as Mt. Morrison, Taroko National Park, and Sun Moon Lake, and many others. Among those places, Taroko is probably the most attractive place of all, not only to the local, but to the whole world. There are a lot of glorious but dangerous mountains in Taroko. When you go in there, you would feel how little you are compared to the nature, and the sight of the huge gorge and cave would also excite everyone.

    分段要住意。

    However, although Taiwan is so full of characteristics, it still faces troubles now. On September 15, 2008, the bubble economy of the world also makes Taiwan suffer from serious unemployment, which causes hundreds of thousands of people’s lack of job. Many people are depressed and stressed under the circumstances everyday.

    「is so good」聽起來太孩子氣了。

    Even so, Taiwan is a young country compared to any other nation, but I steadily believe those who live in this country will do everything that they can to make it revived and become better, because this is our favorite mother country.

    2009-09-22 23:10:54 補充:

    最後一句「because this is our favorite mother country.」改成「because this is our mother country after all.」會好些。

    因為用「favorite」會好像你有好幾個「mother countries」

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