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拜託各位高手幫我檢查看看有沒有文法錯誤好嗎??

本人文法實在是爛到極點..有沒有誰可以幫我修改一下呢..謝謝你!!

I have a special memory in my childhood, which is travel to Malaysia when I was 10.I went there because my aunt marries to there, and she invited my grandmother and I going there to take summer vacation.

That is my first time take the airplane, I so excited even can’t sleep all night. Until the day, I wake up at 3 AM, and we take the taxi to the airport. My site is near the window, I look outside until the building smaller and disappear. And I look the cabin, a huge monitor played movies. The flight attendant gave me the crayon, papers and earphone let me not boring in the plane, after one hour, I asleep with the music.

Suddenly the plane wobbling violently, I woke up frightfully. The flight attendants tell us we are experiencing turbulence right now, so we don’t afraid. But I feel very nervous, about 30 seconds went steady.

That memory is very impressed in my mind, now recall it, I still feel uncomfortable.

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ㄜ..不好意思我是要檢查文法有沒錯誤..不是要翻成中文啦!!

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  • 1 0 年前
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    I have a special memory from my childhood, which was traveling to Malaysia when I was 10.

    I went there because my aunt married into the country, and she had invited my grandmother and I for a summer vacation.

    It was my first time taking the airplane, and I was so excited that I couldnt fall asleep the night before.

    On the day of flying, I woke up at 3 a.m., and we took a taxi to the airport.

    My seat was by the window (I had a window seat), and I looked outside until the buildings got smaller and disappeared.

    I looked into the cabin, a huge monitor was playing movies. The flight attendant gave me crayons, papers and a set of earphones in case i got bored in the plane. After one hour went by, I fell asleep with the music ( or I fell asleep listening to music).

    Suddenly, there was a violent tremble, and I woke up in a fright. The flight attendants told us that we were experiencing turbulence right now, so dont be afraid. But I still felt very nervous, as the turbulence went on for about 30 seconds before it stopped.

    That memory left a very strong impression in my mind, I could still feel the discomfort when I think back on it.

    2009-11-22 01:16:35 補充:

    因為是回想過去,所以動詞都要用過去式,注意一下喔...

    參考資料: me
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  • chen
    Lv 7
    1 0 年前

    Having a special memory in my childhood, I had traveled to Malaysia

    ...when I was 10.

    .I went toMalaysia because my aunt got married here in there,

    .and she invited my grandmother and I

    that we could take summer vacation.

    That is my first time taking the airplane, I am so excited and even so,

    I can't sleep all night,.until the day,

    I woke up at 3 AM, and we took the taxi to the airport.

    My seat was near the window.

    I could look the building smaller and disappear.

    And I looked the cabin, a huge monitor played movies.

    The flight attendant gave me the crayon, papers and

    earphone, let me not boring in the plane, after one hour,

    I was asleep with the music

    Suddenly the plane wobbling violently,

    I woke up frightfully.

    The flight attendants tell us, we are experiencing turbulence right now,

    ..so we were not afraid. But I felt very nervous,

    ...about 30 seconds went steady.

    That memory is very impressed in my mind,

    .....now recall it , I am uncomfortable.

    !

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  • 1 0 年前

    不需要用which來連接,況且後面+beV之後又加travel還滿怪的!

    而且travel後面也不是+to,建議後面是+in

    不然就直接可以換個說法改成visit Malaysia ^_^

    建議以句點收尾之後再說

    I traveled to Malaysia when I was 10.

    你是想表達嫁去馬來西亞嗎?

    建議to後面不要加there喔!

    嫁到那邊可以換個說法

    My aunt has been living in Malaysia after she got married .

    不過我是建議整篇文章並不需要去介紹到這位親戚

    這部份是有點離題了

    接下來就是一些時態的問題和事情先後順序的邏輯思考問題

    以及

    一些可數不可數的用法問題而已了。

    有括號是我個人淺見,覺得有點離題甚至可以不用寫出來的句子

    整篇可以寫成

    I have a special memory in my childhood. ( I visited Malaysia when I was 10 )Being Invited by my aunt , my grandmother and I went there to take a summer vacation .

    That was the first time for me to take the airplane . I was so excited that I couldn't fall asleep all night before the day I took the plane. ( That day , I woke up at 3 o'clock in the morning, and we took the taxi to the airport. ) My seat was a window seat. I could look the buildings outside of the airplane getting smaller and smaller while the airplane was taking off. I also found a big movie screen playing a movie in the cabin.Besides,the flight attendant gave me an earphone ,some crayons,and some pieces of paper to let me break the monotony during the flight. After an hour ,I fell asleep to the rhythm of the music.

    Suddenly, the plane wobbled violently .I woke up terrifyingly. The flight attendants told us ," we are experiencing turbulence now". He also asked us not to be panicky ,but I still felt very nervous .Finally,the situation went steady after 30 seconds.

    This memory is really impressive to me. I still feel uncomfortable when I recall having been in such scary situation before.

    2009-11-22 02:07:09 補充:

    多謝上面smirenn大大的句子讓我知道我自己有錯誤!

    1.*"from" my childhood

    2.*"a set of "earphone"s"

     

    謝謝^_^"

    不過,關於paper,如果是指報告的話,後面才可以直接+s

    不然一般而言只是指紙的話,是不可數的喔!

    參考資料: Gr.Dimension
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  • 婷婷
    Lv 6
    1 0 年前

    我有一個特殊的記憶體中我的童年 10.I 的時候,這是馬來西亞的旅去到那裡,姑結婚,她邀請我的祖母和那裡要 採取的 暑假。

    那是我第一次以飛機,我很興奮甚至不能睡眠的晚上。 直到在的日子我醒在上午 3,和我們去機場計程車。 位於的視窗的我的網站我 看外直到 建築小消失及。 是的並希望在 室、 一個龐大 的監視器,播放影片。 飛行助理給了我在蠟筆、 檔和耳機讓我不乏味的飛機在後一小時我睡在音樂時

    突然,飛機搖擺得很厲害,我醒了驚人地。 飛行助理告訴我們現在立刻遇到湍流,我們不要害怕。 但我感到非常緊張 30 秒 平穩。

    在我心中有深刻的記憶體,現在還記得那,我仍然感到不安。

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