小鯨 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

研究所英文自我介紹,麻煩幫我修改(急)

my name is *** I living in **,

there are four people in my family, including my parents and older brother

I study in ** University Information Management Deportment

In my free time , I like swimming,watch movie,stage show and musical play

My specialty is Database

so,I was admitted to ** certificate

In future research, I will want to use Data mining to research application

of personalization service processes

I hope that I can have an opportunity to study in ** University

in pursuit of further and Professional skill

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  • chen
    Lv 7
    1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    My name is ***, I am living in **, [有暫時住意思 ] I live in x x.

    There are four people in my family, my parents, older brother

    ....and I.

    I study in ** University Information Management Deportment.

    .In my free time, I like swimming,watch movie,stage show

    ....and musical play

    My specialty is Database, so I was admitted to ** certificate.

    In future research, I will want to use Data mining to research

    ...the application of personalization service processes.

    I hope that I can have an opportunity to study in ** University

    in pursuit further of Professional skill .

    2009-12-01 21:11:18 補充:

    文章通順

    真加幾字

    ....and I

    .....the application

    .....in pursuit further of

  • 1 0 年前

    您的文章修改如下,

    Good morning, professors. My name is xxxxx. I am living in xxxx now.

    There are four people in my family,including my parents, an older brother, and me. I am majoring in Department of Information Management at xxx University. I like to go swimming, watching movies, stage showing, and musical playing in my free time.My specialty is Database, so I had a/an xxx certificate. In my future research, I will use the Data Mining research. I hope I have the opportunity to enter your

    xxx University,in pursuit of further trends with your honorable professors.To gain a professional skill is my goal.

    2009-12-02 03:10:36 補充:

    若您想學好英文,我建議你可以參觀蔡老師的部落格。他是我的老師,與他學習半年多的英文,讓我在英文寫作部分突破許多。tw.myblog.yahoo.com/tsai-english/我強力推薦與分享我的老師給您。不過,我的老師目前沒開新課,所以要等他公告了。我們老師主要以理解文法和認識文法架構為主。他目前從事國中和國小還有成人英文教學為主。可以去參觀他的部落格。

  • 1 0 年前

    my name is *** I living in **,

    there are four people in my family, including my parents and older brothers

    I study in ** University of Information Management Deportment

    In my free time , I like to go swimming,watch movies,stage shows and musical plays

    My specialty is Database

    so,I was admitted to ** certificate

    In future researchs, I will want to use Data mining to research application

    of personalization service processes

    I hope that I can have an opportunity to study in ** University

    in pursuit of further and Professional skills.

    大致上是這樣,加油喔!

    參考資料: 自己
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