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小弟我最近要演講比賽,希望大家來幫我抓抓錯誤,看看有沒有地方可以修改(拿高分) 如下: He was the most famous person in the world .He was also a philanthropist, too. He was the man I respect most -Michael Jackson. Michael Jackson was borned in 1958,and he made his debut when he was only fourteen. Although he didn’t have a good time when he... 顯示更多 小弟我最近要演講比賽,希望大家來幫我抓抓錯誤,看看有沒有地方可以修改(拿高分)
如下:
He was the most famous person in the world .He was also a philanthropist, too. He was the man I respect most
-Michael Jackson.
Michael Jackson was borned in 1958,and he made his debut when he was only fourteen. Although he didn’t have a good time when he was a child ,he didn’t complain to his
parents .
Michael Jackson was also the “King of Pop “ His album has sold more than one billion, like :
THRILLER:1 hundred and four millions
OFF THE WALL: 19milions
BAD: 32milions
DANGEROUS: 30 milions
He made a miracle in the world.
Michael Jackson was not only a artist but also a philanthropist. Michael had been abused when he was a kid , so he was determined to assist disadvanted children. He
donated three hundred million dollars and went to Africa to visit those victims of a natural disaster personally, strive all his life for disadvanted children,and he fonds many philanthropic medical organiczations. Like “heal the world” foundation, three large scale hospitals, and he assistances 39 philanthropic organiczations steady. – That was Michael Jackson.
The most famous person in the word ,the singer that has fans at most . And he is also the idols’ idol . His classic movement , unique voice, the sales volume of his album are peerless .Although he was gone, he was still the super star ,and live in our mine for-ever .
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