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如下:

He was the most famous person in the world .He was also a philanthropist, too. He was the man I respect most

-Michael Jackson.

Michael Jackson was borned in 1958,and he made his debut when he was only fourteen. Although he didn’t have a good time when he was a child ,he didn’t complain to his

parents .

Michael Jackson was also the “King of Pop “ His album has sold more than one billion, like :

THRILLER:1 hundred and four millions

OFF THE WALL: 19milions

BAD: 32milions

DANGEROUS: 30 milions

He made a miracle in the world.

Michael Jackson was not only a artist but also a philanthropist. Michael had been abused when he was a kid , so he was determined to assist disadvanted children. He

donated three hundred million dollars and went to Africa to visit those victims of a natural disaster personally, strive all his life for disadvanted children,and he fonds many philanthropic medical organiczations. Like “heal the world” foundation, three large scale hospitals, and he assistances 39 philanthropic organiczations steady. – That was Michael Jackson.

The most famous person in the word ,the singer that has fans at most . And he is also the idols’ idol . His classic movement , unique voice, the sales volume of his album are peerless .Although he was gone, he was still the super star ,and live in our mine for-ever .

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    He was one of the most famous persons in the world .He was also a philanthropist, too. He is the man I respect most -Michael Jackson.

    Michael Jackson was born in 1958,and he made his debut when he was only fourteen. Although he didn't have a good time when he was a child ,he didn't complain his parents .

    Michael Jackson was also "the King of Pop". His albums of more than one billion have been sold ,shch as:THRILLER:1 hundred and four millions ,OFF THE WALL: 19 milions,BAD: 32 milions,DANGEROUS: 30 milions.

    He was a miracle in the world.Michael Jackson was not only a artist but also a philanthropist. Michael had been abused when he was a kid , so he was determined to assist disadvantaged children. He donated three hundred million dollars and went to Africa to visit those victims of a natural disaster personally, striving all his life for disadvantaged children.He had founded many philanthropic medical organizations such as heal the world foundation, three large scale hospitals, and he had sponsored 39 philanthropic organiczations steadily . That was Michael Jackson,one of the most famous persons in the world ,the singer that had the most fans. And he was also the idols' idol . His classic movement , unique voice,and the sale volume of his albums are peerless .Although he was gone, he is still the super star and lives in our mind forever .

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