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The biggest problem Around Me

Sometimes I feel that time is always short for me. However I tend to idle around while I have free time. I think that maybe I have big problem with time management. As a result, I try to read some books about use my time wisely. Nevertheless, it doesn’t work on me. So I decide to make a plan before I start to enjoy my free time. And then, I determined to divide things into to two parts. For instant, the urgent and things must do part; the unemergent parts. So I realize which thing is most important and needed to be finish. After I finish that, I find I have more time for other business.

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感謝Angeraa的回答,使我作文的文意更通順,但是老師要求短文要有八到十個句子,而且句子長度要不多於八個字,那我又要怎麼改呢??救命啊!這禮拜四要交!!!!!!!!!!!

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    Title "The biggest problem around me" 需要改為 "My biggest Problem"

    Sometimes I feel that time is never enough. I tend to do nothing during my free time. (or I tend to waste my free time by doing nothing)

    I think I have a problem with my time management.

    Therefore, I started reading books about how to use my time more wisely. (or about how to manage my time more efficiently)

    I have divided all my chores (or businesses) into two different parts, the urgent things I need to finish as soon as possible and the things that can be put on hold. (or the things that can be finished later) As a result, I can finish all my urgent things in time and I have more time to do other things.

    2010-01-06 12:04:56 補充:

    八到十句喔?!ok ok 沒問題! 寫簡單一點沒關係嗎?!

    My Biggest Problem

    Sometimes I feel that time is not enough.

    I do nothing during my free time.

    I think I have a problem with my time management.

    Therefore, I started reading books about time managing.

    2010-01-06 12:05:26 補充:

    I have divided my things into two parts, the urgent things I need to finish first and the less urgent things I can finish later.

    As a result, I can finish all my things on time and I still have spare time to do other things.

    這樣可以嗎?!

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