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A little girl stood outside of the church’s kids classroom crying. Because the classroom was full, so she was kicked out. “I can’t attend the kids’ session…” as the pastor walked by, the little girl told him. The pastor heard her need, and held her hands, walked into the classroom, helped her find a seat, she sat down, and attended the session. The little girl was touched, that night, she was thinking of the little ones who can’t worship Jesus Christ.

Two years later, the little girl died in a rented home. Her parents asked the pastors to kindly help them clean up the girl [處理後事]. Next to the body, there was a screwed up bag, extremely old as if it were taken out of the trash can. Inside, there were 57 cents along with a note, “These coins are saved for the church to expand the room for the kids to let all of the kids to have a chance to attend sessions.”

For the past two years, she had been saving money for the church. The pastor dropped his tears as he read the note, and decided to take an action.

The pastor brought the note and the bag onto the stage, telling everyone how the little girl saved the 57 cents selflessly for the church. He challenged everyone to donate for the church’s room expansion.

After a newspaper office had heard of this story, they posted it onto their chronicles. A property agency offered a land worth thousands of dollars. But the church couldn’t afford it. As a result, the agency decided to take the 57 cents as a trademark with the land.

Afterwards, the church members started to desperately donate. Within five years, they reached to two hundred fifty thousand dollars. The little girl had inspired them and made a difference today.

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Next time when you pass by Philadelphia, you can go check out the Temple Baptist Church that can contain three thousand three hundred people. In the kids’ session classrooms building, there are plenty of spaces, so no more kids would be kicked out.

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In the building, in a classroom, there hangs a photo of a girl who saved 57 cents for the church. Because of her selfless donation, a miracle has occurred.

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    There once was a little girl who stood outside a church school's classroom, crying. She was excluded from the class as the class was full. “I can’t join the class…” said the little girl as a pastor approached. The caring pastor understood her want. He held her hands, helped her into the classroom, and got her a seat for her to follow the lesson. The little girl was touched and felt deeply grateful. That night, she was thinking of other kids who couldn't get into a church school.

    Two years later, the little girl died in a rented house. The pastor was asked to bury the girl. Next to the body, he found an old, dusty knotted bag. Inside it were 57 one-cent coins and a note: These coins are to go to the church for expansion so as to enable other poor kids to have a chance to study in a church school.

    For the past two years, she had been saving money for the church. The pastor burst into tears as he read the note. He decided to do something for all this.

    The pastor went onto the stage and produced both the bag and the note. He told everyone how selfless that the little girl saved the money for the church. He threw down a challenge and appealed to everyone to donate for expanding the church.

    Later, a local newspaper learned about this matter. They reported the story in their press. Soon, an estate agent offered a land worth thousands of dollars, but sadly the church couldn’t afford it. As a result, the agent decided to take the 57 cents as a trademark to the land.

    It was then everyone in the church started to donate generously. Within five years, they managed to raise 2500 dollars. The little girl's spirit had inspired them to contribute.

    Today, the Temple Baptist Church in Philadelphia can hold 3300 children. Every kid is guaranteed a good education with more spacious classrooms available.

    It is said that inside the building, there hangs a photo of the little girl who donated 57 cents to the church in a classroom. Because of her selfless sacrifice, a miracle has occurred.

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