のぞみ 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

急!!請幫忙看哪裡有錯誤需要修改(英文句子)

 

 

請馬上回答!!!!(巴)

 

 

這是搭配簡報(ppt)一張張講的(自我介紹)

(有空格開來就是下一張)

請會英文的大大幫我看一下文法單字等等哪裡有錯誤需要修改

或是句子不通順...或者上下文有點奇怪...請"看仔細"阿!!=ˇ=

 

 

!!!並幫我修改...!!!

 

 

麻煩了ˇ非常感謝:)

 

 

 

Good afternoon,everybody.

My name is XXX.

Let me talk about my family.

There are five people in my family.

I have a serious Dad,an affable Mom,a naughty younger brother and a willful younger sister.

I usually quarrel with my brother,but I have better relationship with my brother than my sisiter.

 

 

I am seventeen years old.

I am a Sagittarius.

 

 

Now, I am the sophomore of the Department of Tourism in the National HengChun Vocational High School

 

 

I am interested in reading comic books and watching cartoons.

I will buy and keep a set of comic books or cartoons if I like them.

There are at least more than 30 comic books now at my home.

 

 

This is my idol, *Kanata Hongo.

(*這是日文名字發音的羅馬拼音,一樣要先名再姓嗎?)

He is a Japanese actor and he is my favorite person in the world.

I have been loving him for three years.

He is young,but he has excellent acting skills.

 

 

演技是acting skills?還是acting就夠了?

還有再麻煩翻譯這兩句:

 

 

1:我的自我介紹到此

 

2:謝謝大家

 

已更新項目:

比較有問題的是裡面提出的那兩個問題(名字和"演技")

還有..

因為有圖片的關係(給大家看)

可以用"This" is my idol嗎?

2 個已更新項目:

 

 

我又再詳細發問了一次

請大大到這回答:http://tw.knowledge.yahoo.com/question/question?qi...

20點噢、謝謝黑夜星龍大大的意見:)

 

 

3 個已更新項目:

那jimmy大大"任性"要用什麼單字呢?

He is a Japanese actor and he is my favorite idol in the world. (Person→idol)

↑如果我的意思是不在偶像範圍內,是當作一個人來喜歡,person是可以的吧?XD

4 個已更新項目:

Now, I am the sophomore of the Department of Tourism in the National HengChun Vocational High School

因為要擴充...所以...但如果要用原本的句子是沒問題的吧?

3 個解答

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  • 1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    首先 我覺得你把affable改成gentle;把willful改成obstinate;並把quarrel改成argue會比較好喔!

    I am a Sagittarius. 應改成I am a Sagittarius+boy/girl.會比較好:)

    Good afternoon, everybody.

    My name is XXX.

    I am seventeen years old.

    I am a Sagittarius boy/girl.

    Then, let me introduce about my family.

    There are five people in my family.

    I have a serious Dad, a gentle Mom, a naughty younger brother and an obstinate younger sister.

    Although I usually argue with my brother, I still have the better relationship with my brother than my sister.   

     

    Now, I am the sophomore at the Department of Tourism in the National HengChun Vocational High School

      

    I am interested in reading comic books and watching cartoons in my leisure time, so I will buy and keep few sets of comic books or cartoon videos if I like them. In addition, there are more than 30 comic books at my home now.

     

    This is my idol, *Kanata Hongo.

    (*這是日文名字發音的羅馬拼音,一樣要先名再姓嗎?)…恩,沒錯

    He is a Japanese actor and he is my favorite person in the world.

    I have been fond of him for three years.

    He is young, but he has excellent acting skills.

     

    演技是acting skills?還是acting就夠了?…acting skills正確

    還有再麻煩翻譯這兩句:

     

     

    1:我的自我介紹到此

     

    2:謝謝大家 (我改成”謝謝大家的聆聽”~)

    My introduction is over, thank you for listening.

    加油,也請你再做最後確認吧(因為文章我有幫你稍作修改唷!!

    2010-03-21 21:08:32 補充:

    我不懂你指的擴充的內容耶

    Now, I am the sophomore "at" the Department of Tourism in the National HengChun Vocational High School.

    這樣比較好吧=]

    參考資料: 我自己 應外系學生:), 自己
  • 1 0 年前

    uh...基本上你好像刻意用很多"大"單字噢! 雖然中文意思是還可以,可是講起來文鄒鄒的,不見得好喔! - - 我有把你改的稍微口語化一點,讓你參考一下喔。 此外,有些小細節的錯誤,我也幫你改了一下。

    Good afternoon,everybody.

    My name is XXX.

    Let me introduce my family.

    There are five people in my family.

    I have a serious (strict) Dad,an affable Mom,a naughty younger brother and a willful younger sister. (這句你用的形容詞, willful,蠻強烈的耶= =,通常用在負面上。 形容自己的妹妹感覺不是很恰當,但是就看你囉....)

    I quarrel (argue) with my brother sometimes, however, I have a better relationship with my brother than my sisiter. (小細節修改。)

     

     

    I am seventeen years old.

    I am a Sagittarian.

     

     

    Now, I am the sophomore of the Department of Tourism in the National HengChun Vocational High School (這句我會直接說...I am a year 11 student in.XXX school....簡潔又了當)

     

     

    I am interested in reading comic books and watching cartoons.

    I will buy and collect a set of comic books or cartoons if I like them.

    There are at least more than 30 comic books now at my home. (Collect*)

     

     

    This is my idol, *Kanata Hongo.

    (*這是日文名字發音的羅馬拼音,一樣要先名再姓嗎?)

    He is a Japanese actor and he is my favorite idol in the world. (Person→idol)

    I have been loving him for three years.

    He is young,but he has excellent acting skills.

    其他大部分都算還可以,雖然感覺有點僵硬,但是能表達你意思就好囉!

    (我文法也常常犯小毛病,有自己抓到的話請見諒 =P)

    參考資料: 生在美國,正在澳洲讀高中的我。
  • 1 0 年前

    多一些贈點才會有人願意回答

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